Superannuation that your body so fulsomely frames, there is immanent youth in your quote and, I would presume, in you as well. CUTE!!! CUTE, QUOTE!! Why not? Why the fuck not? I have but one question. Who would provide and/or make financial allowance, for the candy!?

I have but one suggestion that I would offer in the hopes of making your quote more vital, more sentient and more alive. Your exordium or opening sentence, lacks, if only to myself, the punch or gusto with which I believe you were intent upon delivering . Seize the moment, man. (could easily be corrected by replacing the period, with an exclamation mark) Seize the moment, man! Your quote possesses both a subjective truth and an objective truth, both of which are most certainly true. Keep writ...

The written unraveling of your quote would exceed expatiation, even to the detriment of what would be my swollen fingers. As to your muse, be it vegetable, mineral, animal, man, woman, or child, only you would know. Your quote is exceedingly expansive, and is almost too broad to stand on its own as a quote. There would seem to be something of context, backdrop and/or storyline missing. There is also imprecise puntuation, as your question ends with a period, rather than a question mark. Its pr...

Now THAT, is a motherfucking QUOTE!! I second that for REAL!!!

With immediacy and before having read a word of your poem's content, I enjoy that there is the stimuli of visual seperation and stanza. I do also love and adore, your tercets. But in what serves as a couplet, you could, possibly, more fully serve its tension, if only in the solitary eyes of this spectator, by positioning the placement of an ellipsis mark after the words "stop," or "suspension," either would work. But I semantically cotton towards. You stop, suspended . . . still frozen in tim...

"Yes Lord!!! a poem, with rhyme scheme, a REAL poem not some blurb of bathos, that postures as poetry. How I have serched the welkins and the wastes of Urbis, alike, for the likes of you!" Was what I upon initial inspection, for the sake of maintaining the freshness of my initial impression, prematurely typed. Of all the other poems that I've grazed over in reading, yours is but the second to attempt some rhyme scheme, and I applaud it and you. Do you know that you have placed your entry unde...

I immediately loved the disjointed, almost sporadic and splotchy, structure of your poem, it dances with beautiful choreography. There is something richly palatable and palpable, alike, in the images evoked by "Iced tears . . . on cherried cheeks." I almost found myself at the refrigerator door, so deliciously did these encroaching images ensconce themselves upon my sensuous sentience. While the rest your poem reeks beautuously with rich dispondency!! Thoroughly Enjoyable!!!

On your introductory stanza . . . HHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAA HHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!! Too much!! Entirely TOO MUCH!! You are an insane, lovable, old fool!!! YES, YES, YES and YYYEEEEEEESSSSSSS!! How I laughed, and how I EVEN NOW continue in its pursuit: My malated eyes are barmy with tears. Your poem is a subtly constructed work, of protean masterpiece, and it displays bawdy ingress, philanthropic median and sacredotal egress with tripartite precision. Irreverent and philanthropic...

RHYME, RHYME, RHYME HOW I LOVE THEE, LET ME COUNT THE WAYS! To Whomever You Are, You are the third poet that I have reviewed on Urbis, who has actually written a poem, and it is skillfully written for one so young. You must be an avid poet, as well as an avid reader of poetry. There are but a few corrections that warrent being mentioned. In your rhyme scheme you have used slant-rhyme, perchance unconsciously, mixed with pure-rhyme. For example... "full" and "will", "fell" and "wheel", and "in...