I truly enjoyed this poem to death yet it feels unfinished.keep it up and alway move forward.

Very unique and I am just Brimming with the erg to read more.please keep this up. You did an amazing job in portraying your mood. Good luck and i expect great things from you.

Very simililar to my poety.this peice is a very peaceful and beautiful poem keep writing work hard. With time and effort you can achieve anything.

Very powerful and baring an intence meaning to this poem. I applaud you for your efforts and enjoyed this poem to its fullest.Keep writing.

Very powerful and baring an intence meaning to this poem.The beginning is a bit vague In the end everything was crystal clear. I love your imagery in this piece. I applaud you for your efforts and enjoyed this poem to its fullest.Keep writing.

Very powerful and baring an intence meaning to this poem.The beginning is a bit vague In the end everything was crystal clear. I love your imagery in this piece. I applaud you for your efforts and enjoyed this poem to its fullest.Keep writing.

Very powerful and baring an intence meaning to this poem.The beginning is a bit vague In the end everything was crystal clear. I love your imagery in this piece. I applaud you for your efforts and enjoyed this poem to its fullest.Keep writing.

I very much enjoyed this piece.Keep this up

This is a very interisting structure. This poetry seem to have lost its beat. I feel no rythem nor do I feel flow. The words to express yourself, I do have to admit, are pretty good. Now In this poetry I felt close up what he was feeling. The first stanza could bare more power.The repeatition of the crack for me did get a bit excessive. All and all, Not a poor job. Keep it up