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AGE:
22
LOC: Australia
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 31
LOC: Australia
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 31
I am currently working on a piece of fantasy but that is only in the ideas stage of my method. Also currently re-editing my first novel and trying to tighten the impact of the writing.
I enjoy writing most anything and hope to soon complete my first full length work “The Gauntlet”, which tells of the perils of working in the Australian nightclub industry and the dangers of working directly with criminals and drug dealers.
If I have one request it is that anyone reviewing any of my work would please be honest. I am not looking for a pat on the back. If it’s bad tell me. I am serious about being a published novelist and puppydogging me doesn’t help anyone. I will assume that you feel the same and will review your work as such.
Thanks.
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Attn. Mr ...: When a discharged Australian Commando takes a job at a Surfers Paradise nightclub, he unwittingly puts himself and his fiancée on a collision path with drugs, thugs and a Federal Detective. A thriller, named for the seedy Australian nightclub where this tale takes place, ‘The Gauntlet’ explores how far a man who will go to bring justice to those who have wronged him. The protagonist is a hard working employee who is unsuspectingly drawn into a battle for his life, the life of hi...
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Attn. Mr Agentman: When Luke Bennett, an ex-soldier with a history, takes a job at ‘The Gauntlet’, he unwittingly puts himself and his new fiancée on an inevitable collision path with drugs, thugs and Detective Constable Matheson. Named for the seedy Australian nightclub where this tale of deprecation and retribution takes place, ‘The Gauntlet’ explores how far a man who has lost everything will go to bring justice to those who have wronged him. The protagonist, Luke, is a hard working employ...
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Within the Birthing Suite Damien leaned to Cara’s ear, whispering heartfelt encouragement as she crowned. Hunching his six-foot-four frame awkwardly, he stood-sat at the head of the double bed in the dimly lit birthing suite. There had been few complications and the birth of the couple’s first child had, so far, been relatively pain free. Later, Cara would agree, saying that she had suffered more painful female-related cramps. At that moment however, Damien was sure that Cara would, at any mo...
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So whats the go with editors - has there been a serious decline in the availablility (and quality) of professional editors? - Agents were, as far as I'm aware, always hard to get a hold of, and these days Publishers abound. So how do I impress an Agent enough to get him/her to find the right Publisher for me??? The answer used to be find an Editor, pay him/her a ridiculous fee and get your 'finished' manuscript edited to a professional level, write a good query letter (i'll probably get to th...
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Attn. Mr Agentman, When Luke Dillon, an ex-soldier with a history, takes a job at ‘The Gauntlet’ he unwittingly starts himself and his new wife on a collision path with drugs, thugs and death. ‘The Gauntlet’ is an in depth look at the seedy underworld of Australian nightclubs. Named for the nightclub where this story of drugs, money and retribution takes place, this novel explores how far a man who has lost everything will go to bring justice to those who have wronged him. The protagonist, Lu...
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Hi, I like this very much. The plot is strong but hard to grasp. here are some pointers I think will strengthen the piece. Prologue. It is very difficult to get into due to a grammar error in first sentence. You need to strengthen first sentence's impact. Then remove the overly wordy second sentence to keep that impact. You need to tell your audience more about the character's pain before you describe the room. The POV is first person and the old shelves packed with junk are the least of his ...
Hi, this is much better. A few more suggestions: 1. I think that you should try "When maggie plucks.... she suddenly...." i.e add when and replace and with she. 2. I'm still not sure about the last line in the first paragraph. It seems unproffessional. Maybe try "At 105,000 words, 'stuck in the waiting room' is full of comedy, romance and chaos." It's up to you but I think that this should move to early in the second paragraph. 3. The final line of the minisynopsis is lacking - try "...before...
Hi, "...actions were all wronge" Im not sure if this is a spelling mistake or intentional. I like it, I think. You need to think about whether or not this will slow the pace or intregue the audience. "i held another’s life..." I think that I've would be stonger here. You should try to work a recurring theme or image into each stanza to strengthen the overall effect. I think that this is very strong and with some work would definately be publishable. thanks for sharing, I hope that this has be...
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