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AGE: 26
LOC: Oak Creek, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 16

I’m interested in reading and writing.  My favorite authors are Chuck Palahniuk, JD Salinger, Ayn Rand, George Orwell, Bret Easton Ellis, Chuck Klosterman, Mick Foley, Douglas Coupland, and others…

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Short Story / An Extra Person
Version 1
5 Reviews   1 Comment
I pull the burlap duffel bag off the bed and hoist its strap over my shoulder; I guess it would make sense if I was feeling a lot of different things at the moment, but all I’m really thinking is that it’s time to embark on an adventure. The bag is filled with everything I own in the world. I walk out of the room, turn around and take in the place where I had spent all the years of my life, a room that I eventually shared with three brothers. A room that bears absolutely no evidence that I ex...
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Short Story / Postcards of Sirens
Version 1
6 Reviews   0 Comments
Staring down at the deserted city, he began to wonder what kind of crimes were in progress below. From the 22nd floor, the city seemed to be glowing from thousands of tiny specks. He wished Alicia could see this, it would make a beautiful postcard. He turned his attention to the door of the women’s locker room, waiting, though not patiently. There was only one night left after this, then the trip would be over. This was the first excursion any of them would make to the pool level of the hote...
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Short Story / Shark Week
Version 1
5 Reviews   1 Comment
Still in my bed, I watch as the great white comes into view. The clear blue water sparkles, an orchestra reaches it’s crescendo, and the once distant shark swallows the world whole. My TV screen stays black while a narrator tells me “the great white is an apex predator, it is at the top of its food chain and has no natural predators.” I’m wondering if the shark knows this, if it cares. My cell phone rings, but the display says ‘Mom-Cell’ so I let it go to voicemail. Turning my attention back ...
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7 Reviews   1 Comment
“Well, the thing is that I can’t get it to go from a bed to a couch, and I don’t want to touch it because, well, if I wreck it, then I’ll have to buy Tony a new one,” said Jeff, convincing himself of the futons deficiencies. “We can just sit on your bed,” said Colleen. Fifteen minutes passed, on USA was the comedy, ‘Old School.’ Colleen and Jeff’s heads rested uncomfortably against the hard jagged wall of his dorm room. He snuck several peeks at her tan legs, illuminated by the white Christma...
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Short Story / Everything Happens
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18 Reviews   4 Comments
He told me once of his belief that many police chases end in the criminal getting away. He would say that the cops and the media cover this common event up so that less people try. I thought about this as I exited the hotel elevator and walked into the decadent 17th floor lobby. I should call him now I thought, I should call Shawn, and I should make up with him. First though, I need to get out of this bikini, I think. I wonder why I got myself such a skimpy bikini in the first place. That isn...
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Quotes / Pushing Lines
I would just say that we should make sure that we don't let others draw those lines for us. I think though, this could work if you dropped "others" and just say that when we draw a line we should make sure that it isn't drawn in permanent marker. I guess maybe you are talking about this within the scope of a relationship or as a child, this works in both of those situations, but in a broad sense, I think that we should allow ourself more free will than to say that we would let others draw lin...
Short Story / 'The Omega Tree'..
Okay, wow, I really liked what you did. I think it is really smart, and a lot of the passages for me were immeasureably deep. Still, I think that the end was the most beautiful part of the piece. It took me back a little. I think that you definantly achieved the goal of making each passage able to qualify as it's own poem. I would like to see where this is going, but your idea of a schizophrenic is interesting. Steer with cattle prod, into blind spot Lye still, molly coddled qualms Its bile d...
Short Story / Nomen
I think this seemed very realistic. One thing that I would say is that you should pick an older sounding name for the Amanda character. The 'Amanda' name doesn't seem like it has been around very long and it's hard to believe that that is a woman who has been dead for one hundred years name. That is probably my biggest problem. Other than that, I think that the piece is strong. I think the idea of him talking to someone who is dead is intrguing and this seems like the beginning of a bigger pr...
Short Story / Stinkhole --(Revised)
Initally, I began to think that we were supposed to sympathize with Stinkhole. Later, we were supposed to be cheering Jack's "recovery." My problem with that is that we weren't really ever given any reason to hope for Jack to prevail other than (I guess) human goodness. I guess I would like to know a little more about Jack. Again, in the beginning I'm thinking that we are taking a different perspective on Stinkhole, this is just a job for him, we all have jobs, sometimes they are hard or we a...
Short Story / Untitled as of yet
In a lot of ways, this is a powerful piece. You spent a lot of time developing Cally’s character in the beginning, but we only saw glimpses of the story of her life and it left me wanting a little bit more. Don’t tell me how she is… show me. There were several problems in relation to usage of words, I would suggest that you take this into Word which will give you the corrections that you need to make, for example: near the end you spell ‘soul’ as sole. Big difference, the reader will know wha...
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