Politically I'm inclined to disagree with this poem, but aside from that, which is merely a matter of opinion, I like this, and the title is perfect. You maintain the rhythm well and get your point across with an air of ease. Well done.

Overall I like the general attitude and motivation behind this piece. It's well thought out and written in a mature fashion. One thing I would definitely recommend is to finish with a word other than "germinate" at the end of the third stanza. It has an odd connotation given the context and I really don't believe it serves the poem well on the whole, distracting from the point. Other than that, good job.

You have a gift for description, and set the scene very well at the beginning, providing a good foundation for the rest of the piece. You have an adequate use of detail, allowing it to enhance the story rather than distract from it or slow it down. That said, I would like to see this expanded. I feel like there is more to this story than what is being told, and I'd love to see what it is.

First off, a very strong beginning. You capture the reader's attention subtly and skillfully, and already I can tell that I'm going to like your writing style. Also a good job on your use of dialect within the dialog - it flows nicely, unforced. I love the prayer: a good use of comic relief. You're selection of "epic characters" is an interesting one. Your choices fit well within the story, though. This story is handled well and tastefully. I think you did a good job getting into the boys' mi...

I like this a lot, very cute. However, I think you have it categorized incorrectly, seeing as it is not exactly a limerick. You may want to look into that.

I've definitely seen it (I'm a huge Potter nerd, or was at one time), but always worth repeating! :)

The story is good, but at the present moment a bit dry. You mentioned this is based on truth, so no one should know better than you what is going on inside the characters is. As it stands right now I'm actually thinking it could work better as a screenplay. Your gift definitely lies within dialog. That said, I also feel like the story drags at times. You get lost in the conversations even when they don't necessarily move the story along. Try to watch out for that. Overall I like the idea, but...

I believe I've read this before, but it seems different upon a second reading? Perhaps a revised version? Nonetheless, I find that I enjoyed this even more the second. I really appreciate the unique point of view that is brought to this story - I definitely have not ead anything like it. Admittedly I am still a bit confused by te main character's abrasive personality, but I would not go so far as to say that it distracts from the story, because it doesn't - I personally have trouble seeing ho...

I really like this. Short, light, concise, and to the point, with just the right amount of playful humor. Everything that a good limerick should be. Well done.