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Nice lines all the way down, Good rythm and pace with a great tale. A slam piece of anger and hush in places if I ever heard one? Good work

Perhaps this is a verse from a cosmic folk song?

Reads more like a pop song than a poem and I expect this is a spoken word piece that you have tried to interpret to the page. Not doing it for me there but I can hear this. Not bad but you need to do something to lift it off the page, Podcast it perhaps?

A gritty and cowboylike description of a place I have read much about and know that the current Scorpion in the world´s ass (great line that) grew up there (I think, correct me if I´m wrong) The overall image is as brutal as it sounds, a neon hell hole. The pace is good throughout too. Good work

The word has not caught on yet but I gave birth to it for these very beats...SEXCELLENT! Raw, passionate and gutsy, you hold the attention of the reader in a drum n`bass tempo from start to finish. One of the best poems I hae read for a while, you are obviously a well seasoned poet. Great writing