Ace's profile
AGE:
20
LOC: Kapolei, HI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 21
LOC: Kapolei, HI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 21
My name is Ace Gowan and under the guidance of God, I pray to become a published author in both poetry and fiction. I also strive to be as good a critic as I am a writer so feel free to ask for a review and please be kind enough to leave one for me.
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They say people don’t change. You see we go both ways. And I think. And I think. And I can’t stop thinking. What have you done to me? I’m not who I was or used to be. Is this called moving on? Is this called moving on? I’ve been so scared lately, Without yours, my hands are shaking. Oh baby, I’m taking too long to live Said you loved me one day. Now we’re running away. And I feel. And I feel. And I can’t stop feeling. What have I done to you? You’re not who I loved or then once knew. Is this...
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Version 2
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"To love someone is to learn the song that is in their heart, and to sing it to them so its beat becomes a dance."
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"To Love Someone is to Learn the Song that is in their Heart, and to Sing it to them so its beat becomes a Dance."
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"You have this, this, unspeakable quality about you that I can't quite put a finger on; but I know if I placed a hand, I'm afraid I could never let you go."
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Version 3
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We have traveled all routes of existence, but never have I set foot upon more beautiful a scene than its First and Final Destinations.
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Good job here. I think that you have some good potential here. the uncomfortable comfort found in curling up with a pillow? good lines there. probably my favorite of the piece. Not much can be said here, I think that you describe things rather well. I like the major switch in schemes also, adds a bit to the scene as a whole. keep up the good work.
I think it was very simple. I think that in its simplicity was a good sense of reality that i got out of this. I don't think it moved me especially but i think that it was generally worth the read, coming from me who enjoys more of the serious stuff. good job overall. thanks.
Great job. I think that you described love very well. I think that your use of metaphor was lovely. On the other hand, I think what you have here is manufactured as opposed to real. I think that you found words relative to love and painted a picture that would appear nice if actually drawn, but the fantasy, at least in my opinion, should not dominate the reality. This ends up skewing the emotion. You are on to something, what I am talking about comes with experience. Keep at it!
Cute. I think you did a good job here. I think that at some age this is right on the money for girls. stupid girls, just kidding. But definitely think that girls should read this because they would probably see themselves in your words. keep it up. ACe
Great job here. I think you opened up great entrances into your mind for me. I think that you should elongate it a bit, even though keeping it this way would be just as good. Either way, I enjoyed reading what you've written. keep it up!
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