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CHAPTER 3 Losrein took me into his, home, as if I was his adopted son. After he told me what I was, he took me to the local tailor in the village near by. Well in modern terms you would call him a tailor, he took me there and made sure I was fitted with the best robes that his money could buy. We spent the afternoon there, picking out clothes for me to wear, I had no objection, I wasn’t even paying very much attention, I was trying out my new senses. They gave me a feeling of such power that ...
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THE FIRST KISS by Ben Mealer I draw her close to me. Holding her in my arms, and looking deep into her enchanting and mesmerizing eyes. Feeling nothing but total and never- ending love for her and only her. Wanting nothing else in the world except to kiss her sweet lips. I have kissed many women before, but have never kissed the angel of my heart. I have never tasted the sweet lips of the goddess I hold in my arms. I leaned in and kissed her softly, and every dark and dreary thing in my hear...
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CHAPTER 2 When I got in my apartment I took my jacket off and I hung it on the coat rack. My place smelled like molded bread and beer with a little urine mixed in. The place was a complete mess too, pizza boxes, empty beer cans and dirty clothes everywhere, place looked like it hadn’t been cleaned in about six years. I went into my bedroom, which was just as messy as the rest of the apartment. The bed stuff was ruffled, with dirty socks hanging out of my dresser drawers. “ I need a maid.” I s...
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ADRIAS By: Ben Mealer CHAPTER 1 We’ve all heard the myths and legends about vampires. Mostly when we were young, and thought they were one of those monsters waiting for us in the darkness. In my story you will come to find out these creatures are as real as you and I are. And you will find a few more surprises as you read. I’m Sgt. Stanton Kapelle; I’m a homicide detective with the N.Y.P.D. Here’s where my story begins... As I drove along through the dark streets of the city, trying to keep ...
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Good writing, really great story. There should be a break in the paragraph when someone speaks but besides that is great. Really leaves the reader wanting to go on to the next chapter.
It's great writing. Excellent story I think, no typos from what I saw. I like the setting and the language, it really contributes to helping the reader get inside the world you've created. It reminds them that this is different from their world and that this book gives them a brief escape into another. Which Is something every author should strive to work for I think. Keep writing, you're doing fine.
It's great writing. Great setting, great story. Not much else you can do, you've got a great book on your hands I think. You're doing great, keep writing.
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