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LOC: Richmond, VA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 14
LOC: Richmond, VA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 14
My book, Afterthoughts Of A Few Short Twenty-One Twenty-Two Years, was just published back in March 2006, by PublishAmerica. I am currently trying to work on making my writing more accessible (I’ve posted my entire book, the best I can on this website, page by page). Speaking of which, does anyone have any feedback about PublishAmerica? Is there anything positive or negative anyone has to say about it? I may need to find a new publisher and terminate my contract. I am in the process of searching and also searching for an agent. Thank you for reading. Feedback would be appreciated.
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Roses are red, so is blood, The thorns do the pricking, The blooms admire the flood. The thorns of the Rose do not prick you. You prick the Rose. The Rose’s beauty is not Literally what it seems. I don’t like Stupid people. Common Sense works Miracles. Everything is Black and White— Simple and Plain. If you have no interest in me, Then why come near? Make use of the space that surrounds us all. By coming near, you are trying to Transfer your Fear into my Strength.
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No motivation. No Life. No existence. What do you do? Life’s a bitch… Sometimes you gotta slap her around a bit… When someone asks you how you feel, and you don’t know the answer, That is the answer. Don’t ask Stupid questions because you know the Answers to them and that is such a Shame. Laughing at someone when you are in front of them is not a wise decision. Laughing at someone in any way is not a wise decision— Unless you can laugh at yourself first. If not— May you rot in hell.
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Light, Dark. Day, Night. I just want the Light. It doesn't matter whom is shining down. I just want to pace the ground. It's so calm. It's so quiet. Yet, there is a riot. A riot in the unseen, unknown, imagination. Stereotype it if you will. Give it this sick reputation. It's only bliss. It's only bliss. Resting version of the day - The other side of the same coin. Why can't I join? Why can't I join? Why can't you leave? I just wanted to spend some time. I just wanted to walk in the moonlight...
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Life Is What You Make Out Of It— Make The Sky. Destiny Is Savoring.
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I take risks— But do not take yours when you are with me. I know what you are Thinking because I look into your Eyes. Money is most definitely a waste of trees. Yet it is never thrown away. Nothing in Life is easy. Nothing in Life is free. When you run out of ideas, Simply do nothing, For there really is no such thing. Be Yourself. Be Comfortable. Forget All Else. Float In Your Own Oblivion Of Bliss. All Will Soon Pass. Saturate The Beauty To Your Completeness Until The Journey Ends. That Is ...
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This is a very vivid, visual poem. I can see the wind blowing the grass...also your use of vocabulary, such as, passerine thrush...it's lush...It really makes the reader concentrate. Good luck with it.
Good use of poetic vocabulary...Italian sonnet poetry is harder to make rhyme in English. I must admit, though...I don't fully know for certain what this is about...it's obviously written from an older generation's point of view...it sounds like the woman is in love with someone, but may not easily receive their love? Does she kill him? I'm sure I've gone too far...your use of phrasing is good, but my suggestion is, and you don't have to be literal, you can still be poetic, but maybe broaden ...
Nice piece...I must say, it's almost like a slap in the face of modern technology...definitley original in the use of the technical terminology to create poetic romanticism...I like it a lot...it's kind of touching toward the end...it's short and tells a lot in its minimal length...it's really good...you should keep up what you're doing - remember, originality, uniqueness - these spawn true artistry...and true art inspires a generation...Great work...Good luck to you. :-)
What a bitch! She's a tease...I completely got thrown at the end, when she started to "play nice"...What the hell is her problem?? And? And? She's stifling the man...okay...I thought it was beautiful though...the imagery and play on words...but it threw me off abruptly at the end...She seems a bit two faced to me...okay...is there going to be more to this? Was there anything else before this story? Because I'd like to know more...lol... “GLORIOUS FOOL”she whipped”AND SO MIGHT I BE,BUT ONLY SO...
It's funny, now that I'm reviewing your piece and I see that it says 'best lyrics on Urbis'...I had no idea that they were lyrics until I got to your review page...but as I started to read your piece before I came to the review page, I thought it sounded like a song! So I guess that's a good thing for you...the way it started, with repetition...like a song...there, there's a light...This is a nice piece...I can see where you are going with this...and you say it's a rough draft...it makes sens...
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