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My Muse by Amethyst My muse who loves spring sits by the sea violets on her hair ribbons on her dress, seaweed grow under her feet. Purple sky over the hills wild flowers on grassy fields my muse's eyes glow with dreams. Farewell spring, on time my muse untangles her feet she flies beyond her dreams to crowded streets to busy parks where statues melt in acid tears. Skies turn gray as winter days from a small house sitting by a window pane, with brush in hand on canvas my muse unwillingly now...
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Dear Lonely, Your writing is a confession. As I understand, poems show do not tell. It means you have to use imagery, you must avoid adjetives instead use verbs. The power of verbs make the writing.
Callista, is that suppose to be a Greek name? Nice descriptions, needs to build some tension, needs to entice the reader to ask why, what is happening, in other words it needs some sort of contradiction that builds mystery. That is just a simple impression, nice writing.
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