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AGE: 38
LOC: Little Rock, AR
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 14

I don’t really know what to say about myself. I’m constantly contradictory, eccentric, and prone to moodiness. There are not really any specific things to say about me, because I’m always changing. I also refuse to put myself in a little, safe box so that others might feel safe. Life is not safe. I’m not safe.

I don’t love poetry. It loves me. It’s inside me. In every particle; every atom; every electrical impulse of my brain. It loves me and I can only love it back because, like a symbiont, it lives from me and I live because of it. It opens my eyes; opens my heart; makes me realize myself where otherwise I would walk around my life in a daze of not thinking (kind of like when you’re in Wal-Mart and unconsciously buying shit you don…

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Poetry / Untitled
Version 1
1 Review   2 Comments
Emaciated thoughts of thorny skeletons who steal eyes to pretend to be alive Marionettes hung with unseen strings Unaware of the seeds planted Unknowing of nakedness Blindsearching for a soul Fliting jerkily across a life of torn silk curtains crumbling plaster on a ramshackle tumbledown stage Fools fooling no-one.
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Poetry / Sister
Version 6
12 Reviews   9 Comments
You crawled inside this empty chest ten years ago. You carved a hole within like a grown-up fetus. Vascillation sorrow uncertainty. I try to speak. In that forced-closed-throat way it's as if my every word to you were lies. As if I didn't know you. Maybe I don't. Really. I'm not crazy, sister. You said paranoid. Imaginations tricking me. Sometimes I can't see Truly those words of yours for what they really are. Here is the truth: I am not miscontruing you. When you were here in my heart, in m...
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Poetry / Untitled
Version 1
10 Reviews   17 Comments
You'll see through me. Right? You'll rescue me. Right? From the shadows of myself that I creep around in. I need you to say that everything will be okay. You'll tell me. Right? How to be like you? Healthy. Functional. You'll speak to me, right? So these noisy, insane voices will disappear? In the name of Honesty. I am an open book. Laid bare and raw before you. You won't leave me, right? When you find out how crazy I am. You'll stay with me, right? When I try to push you away?
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Poetry / Untitled
Version 1
3 Reviews   7 Comments
My strasse is too wide. I can never manage to cross it completely. I try. "There's a few thangs in the street girlie." It's the little-man-in-my-head. I don't know who he is never have. He wants to keep me on the curb. Dammit. They always move. Not like they could ever stay in the same place. Ever. So's I could navigate my strasse without getting my legs knocked from 'neath me. Y'know that old joke? The chicken and the road and all? Chickin' only got across the street because there were no pi...
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Poetry / Sister
Version 1
3 Reviews   8 Comments
My chest feels so heavy and yet empty Like you carved a hole in it. You crawled in ten years ago Like some sort of grown-up fetus. Vacillating sorrow and uncertainty My tears threaten to spring forth of their own accord to demand my attention. I try to speak but My throat closes so my voice is forced as if my every word to you were lies. It sounds that way doesn't it? Like someone who doesn't know you? Maybe I don't really. I don't know why you don't love me anymore. I thought my imagination ...
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I think your sentiment is well expressed, but the form seems more like lyrics than poetry. Especially with the repetition of ================= I had to run Run far away There is no where to stay ============================ and ======================= Drifted I am drifting So far I am unrecognizable ================== almost like a chorus. The best stanza for me is the third. I would like to see more of a description of how your love went from blooming to dead and rotten. (I'm a sick puppy I ...
I think this is a wonderful piece. I like the fact that it's not a traditional love lost poem. I think the way you've presented it is original. I wouldn't change a thing about it.
You hit me right in the heart with this. It's so familiar to me. The only thing I suggest is more line breaks. For instance in the first line: ========== Can you handle the blood? Is it something you hate? =============== And at the end, it would pack more of an emotional punch for me if the actions "you love me, you hate me, you want me, you rape me" were all separate lines and sentences. Other than those teeny things, I love it.