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AGE:
22
LOC: Plainview, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 27
LOC: Plainview, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 27
Hello! I am 21 yrs. and writing is my passion. No one here shares that with me or even understands it. I get very exited about my book and I just want friends to share that with.
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There was an immaculate light radiating throughout God’s glorious kingdom; not a speck of darkness dwelled in any part of Heaven. The faint sound of the Angel Choir singing praises to the King rang in the distance, and the clouds were so white and soft; indescribable, nothing like anything on Earth. One of the clouds had been fluffed up, perfect for a seat by one of the angels, Zion. Standing almost eight feet tall; there was nothing average about Zion, even in the realm of spirits and angel...
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Well! I really liked this story. In my opinion the ryme scheme was perfect. It has a lot of things to keep a childs attention, perfect for lots of pictures of the park. There is also a good moral to the story. I pictured myself reading this book to my son as I read, good job!
Your off to a good start, although there were a few grammatical errors that I saw. For instance: "When I woke, I cried tears of joy Smiled wiping them from my eyes I don’t know who my dream man was But I’ll give love another try." In this sentene there should be a comma between smiled and wiping. I liked the idea though, keep it up.
Excelent! I really liked this poem, and I love the way that you interpret nature into your work. Personally, I thought that it was very understandable and well written. You could fix a couple of grammatical errors but that is easy. Good Job! Angel_Wings!
Well I like the idea of this very well. I'm writing a novel as you may know and as I get farther it will be revealed how these two have things in common. There are some things I might work on, like the fact that you repeated several words many times: flutter, struggle, and ground for instance. I thought it was very good though.
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