I like your imagery. I especially like the last stanza. I think everyone has been there - deciding upon a response to a situation and then realizing it's not really what you want. Nice job.

Whoa! What a tale. You've got quite a way with words and with telling the reader about the consequences of their actions. It's a shame to know that so much of this really happens, and you've done a nice job of putting it all to rhyme. There are a couple of stanzas where the meter seems a bit off, but it's not awful. It may just be the way I read it the first time. I think you might have a bit of a horror story writer within you. Let it out!

I think you've shared a great insight into how a person might achieve freedom of mind. I'm curious what type of magazine you plan to submit your article to? I found one grammatical error: "As time progresses, strength (among other compelling characteristics) are gained .." should be: "As time progresses, strength (among other compelling characteristics) is gained ..." So, the word "are" should really be "is" ... if you take out the phrase "(among other compelling characteristics)" you'll see ...

I think for a 13 year old you have some strong, credible views. Are they truly your own? I'm not going to comment on the war in Iraq because I believe people forget why we went there in the first place. As far as marriage between gay people, I think time will change the current view of heterosexual unions. We have to remember that the Bible was written by men, supposedly inspired by God. But the church got involved and twisted the words God inspired. Who knows what is REALLY supposed to be co...

I really like this, but I'm not sure the first word really fits the mood of this haiku. I'm not sure what the colors green and gold represent, but I like the second and third lines a lot. Good job.

I think you totally accomplished what you set out to do. Your descriptions are perfect. I could actually see what you were writing about, thinking about the last rainy day and how the rain drops did exactly what you described. An excellent piece.

I really like this. But I wonder - why did she kill herself? Why was he going to kill him and why did she change her mind? I also like how you portray your mother. Nice feeling in this poem. Good imagery. Keep up the good work!

A limerick, by definition, is supposed to be only five lines, in an a-a-b-b-a rhyming pattern. You should reclassify this as a poem. I think the subject about which you are writing is very cute. The concept is good, but your rhythm should flow a little more smoothly.

Go ahead and finish this piece. I think you've started something decent. The only comment is you use the phrase "my dear" twice in the first stanza. I would take one of them out since it doesn't sound as natural as it could.