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AGE: 25
LOC: Tulsa, OK
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 24

I’m 23, and despite what many believe I should be doing…I can’t seem to devote myself to one thing or another. I was a history major at a good university, within my senior year of graduated and decided…I didn’t want to do that for the rest of my life. Now I’m working toward a degree in Avionics, and quite enjoying myself. For a good number of people, some of my friends and family included…this is completely mind boogling. But hey, You have to take a leap sometimes, right?

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People have a lot of theories about aliens, humans, God, devils, and evolution of the Ape Man. For example, a man in my class was recently discussing how mankind cannot understand or logic out alien intentions. He then went on to discuss the Egyptians and their hieroglyphics concerning 'aliens'. Suddenly a thought occurs to me, and I turn to another classmate and good friend announcing quite seriously, "Alien mates with Ape Man and begets Hu-man..." The thought then complete, I return to my m...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Reveng is Bloody
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Vengeance. There was the small group of men and women that crowded about the royal family and truly believed that he, Victor, was not above such a base reaction to the injustices that he perceived having been done against him. But while they might think it was so, Victor had another opinion on the matter. Vengeance, while a fine and grand preoccupation for the deranged minds of those easy to control, was something that Victor himself did not stoop to. Ah, but it made for a fine sharpened tool...
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Quotes / On Acting
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I am the Greatest Actor In the World...and the only role I play is myself.
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Poetry / Broken Light
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He asked me what was wrong, And my words failed me. How to explain the seething Anguish that consumes my mind? What words exist that can express the emptiness of cold night crushing, engulfing a broken light? How to relate the feeling of searing flames that are The silent screams of tears, Raging against his apathy, His brutal assault of my fragile need, Of hugs void of passion, A kiss without longing, with out need. What words are there to express A forgotten heart that is me?
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Summer
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“Is it always like this?” “What do you mean?” Victor turned to look at her, the waves crashing against the shore, breaking against rocks and firing a spray into the sky that rained down upon those that stood too near. The sky was gloomy, and cloud filled, the air warm as the sun’s light beat down through the cracks in the coverage. The roar of the sea was music to anyone that lived on Tantous, be it the Gileeians that populated the limited surface, or Kayhait’a that lived beneath it’s waves. ...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Questions to other writers
1. A lot of things file into what I call repetitive. Sometimes when I read a paragraph and I see that I always repeat the same pronoun I tend to go back and use the proper nouns in places. I also find that too many pronouns can cause a good bit of confusion. In times like that I will give up flare for concise and clear. 2. I like variety. I like to toss up syntac from time to time and just see what works and what doesn't. I find this is particularly more useful in poetry than prose, though. T...
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Poetry / Reawaken
I believe this is a good start. I think it could stand to be a bit more forceful, which could easily be accomplished by taking out the 'Please' in the second to last line and simply coming right out and demanding that the fire reawakens. I can almost feel the anger in this poem, but not quite. I'm still wait to reach some concise emotions. Good start, though.
Poetry / Seven
Overall I think it is good start for a poem. In reading it, I feel there are a few points that you break too late or maybe add a bit that isn't really needed. In a way it retracts from the feel. Particularly in line nine, I would remove 'and times'. I don't know if I can make it more clear, as the first two bits make me think of a moment shared between lovers, that in itself implies 'times/moments'. I think reading it out loud would help smooth over the breaks, though. Perhaps give you a chan...
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Poetry / Humor
I feel a bit lost when I read this. Perhaps it is because I look at the title and expect one thing, while reading something else. I assume that you mean to express finding humon in a nightmare, but I don't really see the "humor" in it. A change in title would make it more clear, at least in my opinion. Also, I'm not quite sure why "You Smile". It almost seems a bit uncaring, that maybe the subject, "You", wants these things to happen. That they give pleasure in some way. It leaves me a bit co...
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