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AGE: 35
LOC: Le Sueur, MN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 11

Hi, my name’s Brad, I’m also on here as Expression451, but my password would no longer work, and when I tried 12 different times to get a hold of support for this, and using the Email retrieve which sent me ZERO emails… I had to start over.  I think the idea of this place is fantastic, and I loved what I saw from everyone on here.  More about me?  Feel free to ask.  I just want to get my work out there, and see where it stacks up.  I want to either publish my own work, or be published.  

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Quotes / More Quotes
Version 1
11 Reviews   4 Comments
"Since when has flash and style replaced substance?" A good friend of mine asked this while we were watching the new HEADBANGER'S BALL. This would have just been dumb if it weren't for the irony of him wearing a KISS t-shirt at the time. "Brad the secret to a good relationship is to treat every woman like a lady, and to treat every lady like a queen, and when you find that one girl... you treat her like a goddess. Never forget that she isn't perfect, but forgive her for that because she may n...
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Poetry / Caprises 001
Version 1
2 Reviews   1 Comment
(so I don't get hit up on punctuation, lol) The magic dance never lasts, but the things we can’t quite grasp define desire throughout all time. The way it’s been, the way it’ll always be... So on with the show, as the cliché goes. Years, just trees growing to fall. Dutch elm disease of the soul takes it’s toll on everyone. or how it was originally written a few years ago The magic dance never lasts But the things we can’t quite grasp Define desire throughout all time The way it’s been, the w...
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Version 1
22 Reviews   6 Comments
"I am that liberal your minister warned you about!" (For some reason some George Bush supporter called me trying to get cash in 2004) "Life's only a journey if you have a destination; otherwise it's just called Wandering." (This is part of my T-shirt collection, and a two-piece painting set that I'm working on.) "This is a country that teaches you to be selfish, and self centered. Children are coddled to a point that they aren't ever put into a stressful situation, and then they get to 15, 18...
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Version 1
4 Reviews   1 Comment
See it in your eyes, and… see it in your eyes, and I… A river of light flows through your eyes Lightning on the waves, see me in the tide, Hope you see me when you smile Dancing in the light, dancing in my dreams Flows through your soul, starts in your eyes Dancing on the light, dancing in my dreams Dancing in my mind until all else leaves Dancing in my heart, dancing with my soul Dancing through hell and never letting go Dancing on the light, dancing in my dreams Dancing in my mind until my ...
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Lyrics / Corporate Whore
Version 1
21 Reviews   6 Comments
CORPORATE WHORE Getting a raise… getting a rise On your knees most of the time Talking’ the trash, and dishing up the dirt Swallow it down; don’t stain your shirt Because given head, to get ahead Ain’t nothing but a ten-minute chore… High demands high rewards Nothing’s too much for a corporate whore Corporate whore, corporate whore On your back, you advance Corporate whore, corporate whore On the desk, or on the floor Nothing more than a corporate whore Sell out your friends, who needs them D...
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Quotes / illusion
There should only be one space between of and truth. other than that, it's not bad.
Poetry / Sheer Will
This is definitely fragmented. I'd like to see your trifecta when it's done. The words themselves were fine... but it was far too disjointed to give it a true read... too many changes of pace kind of dammed the flow of things. quality words though
My 7 year old daughter thought it was fantastic. So your target audience is hit. Congrats. This is the kind of wonderful piece that could end up being the kind of poem that a child could read, and remember for life. It's really that good. It's just something I can't put my finger on that threw off the flow of the piece. I will message it to you as I'm adding it to my favorites, to share with my son after school.
Poetry / Walk of Fame
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Short Story / The Barney Rubble Blues
I think it would have looked better if the invitation would have been centered on the page. Also be careful that your entire dialog starts the sentence. It makes it look more like a court transcript than a conversation. An example (making this up)... Michael turns to John and says, "This is how some of the sentences in a dialog could look." John shrugs his shoulders and with a look of disgust weakly mumbles, "jerk, you think you know everything?" If you can change the pace of the race so to s...
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