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WOW !!! This is vivid .I enjoyed reading this and you said you were in a bad place when you write this ,well to me it seems you have a talent for it .You are discriptive and with little words my imagnation(missp) sored .Thanks for sharring this

So, you love her but you are not with her ?? I think that is what you are saying . You know how to write poems but I was a little confused and had to read it a few times becouse i missed the meaning .I enjoyed the fact your word play works well with your feelings Meshing words are hard with poems snd you have it down .

I know what you are trying to say and your emotions seem raw here . to me it seems to start off live and then goes south .in this example Whether I live in heaven or hell Graphic but to the piont It is well written and you let the reader feel close to you in a way but this is just my 2 cents

Morbid but I liked it .I think from a killers eyes and a childs eyes this would work for a crime /mystery storie .But its your baby and I think you should go for it .

When I read your discrption at the top I was expecting something different .But LOR it is not !!That is a good thing .You said mushroom chair to many times. But I did not find hardly any flaws .Your flow was even .Your chacters work well together and the detail seems to be at the right leval .So keep up with the book I would like to read some more