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This is terrific. Geurnica's musings over the impermanence of love and beauty take on personal meaning. It is also wonderful how the character shrugs off her emotional outburst. This was an outstanding catharsis and felt genuine, especially in her hasty dismissal of it bearing any significance, which reflects a truth about the separation between emotion and our rationalizations. There seem to be a lot of mundane details provided, but these help the reader gain a perspective into Geurnica's mi...

I really liked this story. I think you succeeded in telling a story through your setting. There were a few parts that I though could be improved: "Yet no one at all was around"- This is a bit wordy. "The apartment had been vacated for three, possibly four days now."-I wouldn't include this. I really like the sense of mystery involved in this story. Having been in AA for awhile I understood the reference. I liked how you tied that into the final cryptic message. In terms of imparting a sense o...

I like the choice that Jesus is forced to make. I get a strong sense that he made the right choice. In rejecting the Bible he left behind the superstition religion that had plagued his Grandfather. By taking up the gun and shooting Jesse James he is avenging his Grandfather indirectly (because his abuelo was killed by a man after James). I would have liked to have seen more closure that supported my hunch. The ending was a quite cryptic and therefore expressed ambivalence towards Jesus' choic...

Flighty indeed! She literally flew the coop on her date. It was a strange twist and my favorite part of the story. I would exclude this: "But, as always, there was a fair chance of her to be too caught up in her fictionalized ideas of real life to notice him." It is an awkward statement and telling. The previous sentence is so good and then this sentence really bombed. You would necessarily need to change the following paragraph and should, because it was awkward as well. I would keep: "So Mi...