Big_D's profile
AGE:
32
LOC: Portland, OR
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 17
LOC: Portland, OR
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 17
I’m a bundle of contradictions and I still like myself. I’m an over analytical thinker and I love getting to the deeper meanings in life, considering them, discussing them, living them. Life isn’t just about doing what you want, it’s about an awareness, of yourself, others around you, the impact you have, taking it all in and enjoying the experience. I enjoy writing and letting my inspiration whether emotions or otherwise drive my creativity… sometimes just a journal entry, sometimes a poem, song lyrics, or an attempt at painting or drawing. I am looking forward to meeting and connecting with other like minded creative people in this atmosphere of self discovery. Cheers.
Items
Version 3
1 Review
0 Comments
Human Blending Machine mixing, pouring, and collecting I answer the call of the Dollar Bill with a smooth finished product
Ratings & Rankings
Version 2
0 Reviews
0 Comments
Human Blending Machine mixing, pouring, and collecting I answer the call of the Dollar Bill with a smooth finished product
Ratings & Rankings
Version 2
0 Reviews
0 Comments
One drink, two drink, no big deal. Third drink, fourth drink can't think, can't feel. Life seems better in this, comatose state. The more I drink, the more life's great. Don't care, how stupid I seem. I'm living in my Drunken Dream. Don't know what I'm doing or who I hurt. Don't even notice that I puked on my brand new shirt. I thought it was all good Fun. Never thought it would kill, like a loaded GUN.
Ratings & Rankings
Version 3
2 Reviews
1 Comment
Standing on the road I am in awe of this place, France, Laragne, this road, this spot, where it all happened. I look around and see the guard rail I missed. I see the ditch I went in, the drop off on the other side, the embankment my car went crashing down, stuck inside. Still remains of my shattered windshield lie below. Flashes of horror pass through my ind. I try to forget, but I close my eyes and take a dep breath. Broken memories of hospital beds, familiar faces, nurses, doctors, and mul...
Ratings & Rankings
Version 2
6 Reviews
0 Comments
Desk work boredom. Bad radio station. My whoredom. Used for profit. Understimulated with the same Everyday is a struggle to get through. By the time I'm home I'm tired. What kind of American Dream is this? Worked life away for owners, bankers, corporate America Trapped in this, debtors corporate slave scheme. Need to escape, be free. I could always quit!?! Where would I stay? What would I eat? Homeless or Slave. Like Democrat or Republican. Is there really a better choice? They both suck.
Ratings & Rankings
[ View all items ]
Reviews
1st person to receive tens from me. This piece was powerful. Regardless of a persons political views on war I think this poem has the power to move your readers. I like the irony of the soldier in the heat of battle not thinking about poetry, but yet here we have a poem after the fact to describe the horrors that shock the senses. I can't imagine, nor do I really want to know how it must feel for a soldier. In other words, I would never want to be in their place and have to suffer the images ...
Thought provoking and jam packed with imagery and simile. I really like it. I think I need to read it about ten more times and let each line sink in and this makes it that much better. It's like I need to let it soak in. Very creative and unique. I like the blended rhyme throughout that is subtle, not sure if you worked to create that or it just fell into place, but either way that is the beauty of writing and letting it flow. I think I like the first line best. I don't really see anything th...
I think I would like it if you turned my flesh into bones instead of my ashes. Then the poem has an apparent feeling of wasted time and aging. Losing dreams as time sweeps by and our dreams are smoke that is blown away. Very thought provoking. I'm not sure I like STOP capitalized... I think it may distract more than evoke the feeling you are looking for. I would move stop to it's own line IE but a walking Stop (--not sure if I would add sign to this line or put it in front of desperate on the...
Overall: Good description/explanation of wives feelings of husbands who stay out late at the bar or even don't come home. I like your imagery of trust slipping out the door, very nice. I am not sure the man thinks you believe him, but he thinks ... a rational person should believe him... Ah let me re approach this... See your poem has an effect on men who read it... I am a man, and I would never cheat on my wife hence the above comment about thinking/wanting to believe that reason and underst...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Idea: open with details of what kids are doing in the car to create a clear picture that shows the contrast between their actions vs. the drivers response which seems to be the effect you are going for... what I mean is it seems you are trying to personify the extreme overreaction of the driver, so give us the first piece by introducing your main character right from the start and show how he is doing something harmless like being a kid and acting his age, and then jump into the harshness tha...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
[ View all reviews ]
Favorites
People
