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AGE: 30
LOC: Hartford, CT
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 11

Hello hello.

I’m a 27 year old person.  Contrary to popular belief I am not a crime solving robot or an alien sent here on a mysterious mission.

I think there should be such a thing as pop tart pizza.

That is all.

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Short Story / Plants
Version 1
9 Reviews   5 Comments
Pre - Sometime in August, Two Thousand and Six I lock the door behind me. Needed to get out, get some air. I fumble through my jacket, looking for my cigarettes. Should be safe out here for another hour or so. Just rained, the air is washed clean. The clouds have blown away, the stars are out. Spark. Fire. Lit. Puff. Smoke billows around me. The crescent of the moon hangs low in the sky. Old moon, old lady. It'll be dawn in a few hours. Don't want to be outside with the sun out. Too much like...
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Non-fiction / Ghost Stories..
Version 1
14 Reviews   7 Comments
When I was five years old, I saw a tall man watching me. I had fallen asleep in my parents bed. I don't remember much about that day, except that it had been a busy one. I slept sound and deep. In the middle of the night, I woke with a start. Someone was here. I was being watched. There was a man-shape filling the open doorway. I was terrified.. but he just stood there. I do not recall anything of his face, or of his manner.. just the feeling that this strange sillouette that towered over me....
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Poetry / Living a life.
Version 1
8 Reviews   5 Comments
'The way out is through.' Dive. Dip. Swim. Kick. Pull. But most of all just do something. You're very passive, Murphy. You build and you ride the waves. But when the currents shift you do just enough to get back into the soft gentle stream. I have lived the life of water. Too passive, too yielding. Not flying but gliding drifting along. drifting away. (and i like it.) I shift tenses, jumping around even in my dreams, I am an observer watching the characters play their roles. I have lived the ...
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I really like the energy latent in this piece. In only a paragraph, we meet a character who is literally in the middle of Hell.. then has his weapon jam and leave him.. we suspect.. to his death. Can I suggest that you tighten this up a bit by shortening your sentances a bit? We read short sentances faster than longer ones.. so they pile on top of each other nicely.. ramping up the tension. The other thing, not knowing much about the subject, I didn't know what a Lee Enfield was at first.. wh...
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Short Story / The Work Day
Well. What a disaster. For some reason it reminded me of that old Scorsese film, "Afterhours".. in the sense that we start with a put together, moving foreward protagonist.. who is quickly demolished by the random terrible things that can happen in the space of just a few hours. There are some gramatically weak passages, "She increased her speed to a jog determined to cross before it changed", for instance stuck out like a sore thumb. Overall however, I rather like this little human disaster ...
Short Story / Recurring Dream
Howdy, writer of dreams myself. I'm looking at this from a dream perspective and not from a christian one (though I am familiar with rapture mythology) Reading the first section, before maryiah speaks.. I hate grammar nits so I'll keep it brief : beware passive voice. The jump from section one until two seems kind of rough.. when is the trumpet blowing.. minutes after she tells she's pregnant.. or when the child is a month old. If it's dream logic at work and you are jumping around in time, t...
I must say, I do not dig this piece. I am not sure what it is that turns me off.. I think it _is_ fairly clunky much like the robot in the beginning.. maybe that was your goal? I don't really feel much in the way of rhythm here either.. *scratches back of neck* I just don't think this works.
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