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This work of yours is simply brimming with life. It's as if it radiates with energy. It's admirable to see a number of noticeable themes from just one piece! For example, stanzas 1 & 2 is largely about an awakening or a realization of something beautiful ("Share a passion, bring forth a light"), stanzas 3-8 deals with savoring the beauties of life ("Reach for air, breath(e) and feel" I believe it evokes an image of someone who is swimming. every gulp of air when someone rises to breathe is so...

I feel that you have captured what many aspiring writers feel whenever they try to compose literary pieces. An aspiring writer may have the best theme in mind with the details to boot but for some reason the words just won't come out. This has been my constant frustration as a writer and a scholar. I commend you for writing such a fine piece. Perhaps you can try to put a subject to give your piece a holistic feel to it. Perhaps you can try something like: "Tried to write but couldn't." By doi...

This piece is quite short, however, it evokes a great feeling of loss. This loss is not something one feels when depressed or simply feeling frustrated in being unable to find the meaning of one's life. The kind of loss that emanates from this piece is the kind which one feels whenever a person experiences deja vu. It's like having an eerie feeling something similar has happened before but you're quite unsure when and where. This was beautifully said in paragraph 5, sentences 1 and 2: "Most o...