Your use of metaphors was simply amazing. Though, the feature which was most immpresive had to be how heart-felt this work was.

hmmmmmm. interesting point of view. this story was good, however there is one technical problem. in the conversation between the Son and the Old One, you may have used "time" to much. just something to think about.

I think this is a good concept, but, its portrayal could use some work. Especially the characters. More than description, it needs some serious back story as to why the villains are able to get away with their torture and abuse. Oh, and watch the capitalization in some places. You have "I" used alot as"i".

Your descriptive language is obviously the key feature of this story, which (in a most spectacular fashion) blends end-of-times prophecy and popular zombie fiction. The only problem I could find reviewing your work was a matter of preference. The profanity used near the beginning put me off a bit (though, it wasn’t much of a hindrance to the reader’s enjoyment). Otherwise, this is a ten out of ten; you officially have a new fan.