I like this piece. I like the way it starts out with personal information, drawing the reader in. It is also very relatable, everyone has asked why at some point. Good tone, good organization, easy to follow. Excellent subject matter for a blog, very personal.

Interesting take on our couch potato culture. Original idea and subject matter. I think the wording might need some editing in order to make it flow better. Overall good effort.

It's a good work, well written and structured. Is it meant to be about self-destruction?

Well structured, excellent ryhme. I am not great at reading poetry perhaps, but it this poem about loss of innocence or mourning? It is not quite clear. The words paint a very vivid scene.

This is a really good piece. Excellent style, I like the use of capitalizations for emphasis. Very interesting subject matter and you have done well with it, but I think this should be listed as a poem rather than journalism.

This should clearly be considered an opinion piece. There is too much personal commentary for it to be considered merely informative. With some re-structuring and editing the article could work. The subject matter is about two important news elements, people and money. However, this article is written in essay style rather than journalism AP style. - One should never use quotes as long as the lead quote and second paragraph of this piece. The subject matter is relevent, but the quote leading ...

Good metaphor, interesting images. I assume this is symbollic of undressing a person. As such, undressing should be compared to unwrapping in descriptions of each act - extend the metaphor. Don't use so many references to food without describing how they relate to undressing. Frequent references to food make the reader hungy, not longing.

This is not a limerick. It is a commentary, it should be catagorized as blogging and diarys.

Good poem, unexpected ending.

Good work, capitalizing DAD was a clever choice.