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AGE: 17
LOC: Bellevue, WA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 14

There isn’t much to say about me because there isn’t much to know about me. I am very opinionated and very isnpired, yet I don’t have all the skill to show my true calling which is story-line creation.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Prologue
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Silently, with no opposition the water flowed up and down the beach. The moonlight glistened off the water, and reflected off the young man’s black armor. He reached down and softly grabbed at the sand. It slowly sifted between his fingers. This place was familiar to him, it was home. The young girl reached for his hand as she approached him. He cupped her hand in his own. She flinched at the ice cold feeling of his palm. She stood next to him silent, scared, but hopeful. “I love you Br…”...
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There are people in this world who look at you and me and take things to far. Upon a grand scale things change to them. I talk to a new girl for the night, dear god he thinks she is hot. Ooh will she hug him when she leaves? Fuck you. There is only one spot on the couch next to a girl I take the spot. Ohmigod he liiikes her. He wants to marry her, watch out sista. Fuck you. I show more respect, more than the other jack-asses. I give them the dignity they deserve. They get the honor they deser...
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Novel Treatments / DA Drake Chp 1 Final
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I do have to say this made me laugh. And that is about all I have to say. -Bobby
Sci Fi & Fantasy / 12 Days Till Sunset, ch. II
I obviously need to read the first chapter. But otherwise your writing style and ability is incredible, way above me! At the part where your describing what she sees when she looks out the window you say "Falland’s least fortunate," If I am correct, which I am not always, wouldn't "less" be better than "least?" I am just throwing that out there. I hope you keep writing. -Bobby
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / why i do what i do
There isn't anything to critique. I really liked the insight gained from this story. I am assuming it is true and to be truthful for someone my age (16) it is truly inspiring. I hope you keep doing what you do because we need people like you in this world. -Gary
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Untitled - fantasy (edit 2)
The story line is great, in my opinion. And because you said no corrections on spelling and so on the only thing I will say is that I think you should work on how you say things, I guess I mean more like formatting. Good Luck! -Bobby
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