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LOC: Modesto, CA
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So yeah. My life. Is a disaster. I have to do all the work in my house and I can't get any help to save my life. I can't believe for a single fraction of an infinitesimistic moment that the contounds of my life are going to be bambroxidated all because of some low-life-flutton-slupping-drowdle-blurting-femur-snapping TRASH CAN!! Am I simply destined to be miserable every week on Monday mornings? IT'S NOT FAIR!! I mean, &n...
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So.. I met this girl. And she's the greatest thing that's ever happened to me. Not to be cliche, or anything. And she really has this.. understanding? Yes, an understanding of the world. She sees things in a way the rest of us, or rather, the majority of us, can not. She's so creative, and amazingly artistic.. She writes poetry, did you know that? She's so insightful, and she can penetrate someone's soul with the simplest of w...
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Hm.. I didn't quite get "it is place", and I don't know if you meant to say that, or exactly what happened there. Uhm.. honestly, it gave me a "whatever" mood. I did like the line about how a prisoner of the physical world can be freer thing, that was good, imo.
So.. My first thought is the first part talks about a beast.. what was it? I didn't quite get that communicated. I don't know, the whole thing was all over the place. It would start one thought, and change very rapidly. I like each stanza thing individually, but together it doesn't.. blend. I don't know.
Aw.. It's over? Well, I think the ending was fairly good, but it could use something with a bit more of an emotional punch. Unless of course, you want people like me going "wha?" Honestly, I was hooked. I think it's a personal thing, but when it said "somebody in my classes" Could you change that a little bit? It just doesn't seem.. right. I don't know. >< Sorry.
Oh geez. First off, dang. Second, even though I don't like being angry, this really gave me a clear and sharp image of the anger, and I still feel the lingering hatred and sense of betrayal. I think it's a great theme, and you did very well with it, in my opinion. I applaud the third line for it's repetition, caught me off guard. XD I really liked it, and I'm pretty sure I'm not the only one. ^^
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