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AGE: 21
LOC: Houston, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 26

Honestly there is not enough room in this endless box to talk about myself. But here goes nothing. My name is Deborah, I’m 17. I’m a senior at Klein Forest, ready to leave that hell hole called highschool. Not ready yet to “grow up” and be on my own. I play a few instruments, violin, viola, and can beat the hell outta some drums. Nah not really but hey… can’t blame me for trying. I’m funny, I guess. I make people laugh and it’s cool, but it’s more of a dumb laughter. Like what’s the moron doing. Still cracks people up tho, so until they stop laughing i’ll continually do it. I live through music and writing. I’m infatuated with anything related to books or poetry. It’s unfathomable to see people pour their life stories onto a sole sheet…

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Poetry / Hush
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Hush my child and dream a sweet dream a dream of brighter tomorrows a life that's live on time not borrowed close those eyes and drift away like a raft at sea where the waters is quiet and all you have is me dream of nights cool and calm when the darkest part of your day is at dawn. Just hush my child and dream a dream where you can be free to explore the unknown and have the blessing to know and not have to see dream a sweet dream where no wrong can be done where your faintest worry is wiped...
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Poetry / Without you
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Without You And with this pill, I dream of a brighter tomorrow A time and place related to anywhere but here For I'll never see his smile which was able and willing to brighten any part of my darkest dawn And with this pill, I am reminded of his touch There I would lie craddled in his arms My nose filled with the perfume of another But all the while... knowing he was mine And with this pill, I am reminded of a love so pure A love so deep it coursed through my veins Rushing about as if it were...
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Poetry / Battling myself
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So torn and confused battered and bruised ready to start anew So desperate to be understood to do the things I once knew they say time heals but when is it over when can I uncover this emotion I've been hiding I'm to desperate to be deciding Come make this choice and take away this pain You'll be the sunniest part of my darkest day Hidden in the shadows and depth of a story untold you'll never know the impact that you have the impact that you hold Relinquish this pain I've caused because I'm ...
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Poetry / Time's up
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It's clear upstairs like after a rainstorm that's been lifted the confusion is broken and the dirt's been sifted Peace has descended and made it's way over but who'd ever thought there'd be a fire to smolder Guess I'm not out of the woods Atleast not yet I have a few bridges left to burn and a few lost bets Time to make ammends with the friend I lost Lookin in the mirror and not liking what I see just yet But how can you mold a damaged piece of clay and can you really open a cage for a bird n...
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Poetry / My somebody
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it's the middle of the night i've just read an email and it's made me cry you don't know me you don't know my friends so how can you know why we talked together laughing sheding the occasional tear it's the beat from our hearts it reaches out draws you in makes us one full part just the chance to tell you how i really feel would be my unaccessable fear to be able to say the reason you make my heart beat the reason i get up in the morning the only reason at night, i sleep anticipating the day ...
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Poetry / Frozen Tears
I really enjoyed this piece. I found it easy to relate with. It was phenominal in my eyes. Minus a few spelling errors, I would say this could really go far. The only thing is there are so many questions left unanswered by this. What is this person suffering from, and why has this other person assulted her and stolen her innocence? If you were trying to leave it ambiguous then you've achieved your goal, and if not then I'd spruce it up just a tad. Overall it was awesome. Keep it up!
Poetry / 2 AM
This was really deep. I thought it was a good poem overall, but somewhat hard to follow. I loved the entire 2 a.m. thing you had working. It seemed, to me, that that's the hardest part of the night to deal with. It's the time that reminds you that you're alone, with not much to salvage. Very interesting. I would really work on this piece because it has a possibility for greatness. I would add a few more lines and work on the flow of the poem. Another thing, and this is just an idea, I would e...
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I know exactly how you feel. It's never been easy to talk to my dad, and as sad as it is, the older I get, the harder it becomes. My mom is the exact same way. It seems like everytime I open my mouth I'm bombarded with questions on why and how I'm feeling. She's like one of those therapists that refuses to believe a person can do or act with a string of emotion behind it. You know, I still question what they saw in each other to begin. My mother relies on emotion while my father denies it com...
Short Story / My Two Dads
This piece was pretty good. I liked how it was written in the point of view of a younger child. The only thing I would have liked to see was a closer look at how the boy was feeling. I mean throughout the entire story you have people crying, or you can tell they're upset, but there is no real emotion that is displayed. Like why were they crying. How were they feeling deep down. Another thing, to expand your writing, I would make it like he's having a flashback of his childhood. Say perhaps he...
Poetry / deep in her eyes
I didn't think this poem was all that bad. I mean like the other comment said, it could have been a bit more original, but if this piece was really written in a time of grief... then I say it's perfect just the way it is. In other words, if you wrote this in the perspective of your own life then it's great, but if you were simply writing it to write then yes, it could use a sense of individuality of all the other poems we've read just like this. Besides the fact that this poem was incrediably...
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