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LAST LOGIN: September 17
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When I close my eyes, open them and see you I fall into deep thoughts of nothingness. I peek just a bit and I see a glimpse of what I think is hope but it isn't, it is of you. I wonder if this is real or is it just a dream, something my imagination conger up to make it seem like I'm finally living in reality. But no, it is you. You know exactly what I want. I don't have to ask or tell you what to do, you just do. Still with my eyes closed I feel you breathe your warm breath on my neck and the...
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Who am I to love? You see me Look at my scar Bruised with pain and hopelessness Look at my scar Who am I to love? You see me Crying when life becomes what it is Longing for more of what I want it to be or even need it to be Look at my scar You see me Reaching for more but keep dropping what should be my success Look at my scar Who am I to love? You see me Feeling sorry for myself Wanting and needing for someone to feel sorry for me to stop me from destroying the little sanity that this life a...
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Who am I to love? You see me Look at my scar Bruised with pain and hopelessness Look at my scar Who am I to love? You see me Crying when life becomes what it is Longing for more of what I want it to be or even need it to be Look at my scar You see me Reaching for more but keep dropping what should be my success Look at my scar Who am I to love? You see me Feeling sorry for myself Wanting and needing for someone to feel sorry for me to stop me from destroying the little sanity that this life a...
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Damn you Looking my way as if you got something to say Speak loud and clear don’t mumble Speak so that I can hear the Bullshit That’s coming from your mouth Let me hear you shout the things you want to say about me So then I can be At peace Fuck you And all that you do to me And her and he Because you don’t know us and who we aim to be You can’t make us have any insecurities Bitch See what you made me say When all I want to do is be nonjudgmental and see you for you But You bring out that Mot...
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Give me the strength to look in the mirror today oh Lord Help me to see myself for who I really am I want love but I feel I’m unworthy of love from anything I am the beast, the serpent, the woman giving only temptation to those who let me tempt them with these gifts that have been created in my mother’s womb. When will I know true love, unconditional and pure love? "When you love yourself", He says When you love yourself
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This really hit home as I went through the same thing two years ago with my ex. For 12 years I supported my family and put him through college and for 12 years he never worked. I finally gave up, had him pack our son up and get out. Let me tell you it was the hardest thing I ever did in my life but I finally feel free. I love the writing and the expression. You as the writer took me to that place of understanding. Even if I didn't go through what you went through as a reader I was sitting in ...
I understood where you were coming from with this but it seemed like a huge run on sentence. Your way of expressing is really good and with time, more love, and a bit of pain you will be even better in the future. It was kind of hard to read for instance, "Sweetly sing to me the divine lyrics that bring tears To my eyes, what was for a moment is now gone" By putting a cap on "To my eyes," ended the first sentence. Which messed up the flow of the read. Shouldn't it be..."Sweetly sing to me the...
I think songs are better written about the drugs instead of the dealers. If you were talking about a particular drug as a son of the devil it would make more since to me. I think when you point the finger at a person it becomes hard to believe because its not the dealer that actually does the damage, so to speak, its the actual drug. I know you're going to say the dealer puts the drugs out there, but the people who buy the drugs have a choice to use. And lets face it, its the drug that tempts...
I really liked this piece. It really shows a womans mind, so emotional and so off and then on again. This poem shows the answer to a mans question and comments on "What is a woman thinking" and "I never know what she means". No one but the woman who is having these feelings know. What did you mean by this: Why wasn’t I the one? Why couldn’t I boast? I though I won Didn’t even come close I though I won? Was this a mistake or can you explain? Other than that I think this was a very interesting ...
I really don't know how to critique someones journal because I don't think a critique is necessary when someone is telling a story regarding a personal experience. There were some over use of using Darren's name but other then a few other minor mistakes the read was rather interesting and the writer was able to fullfil all of the answers to my curiosity regarding Darren's situation.
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