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AGE: 24
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 11

thinker.believer.doubter.indulgent. musician.photographer.listener. talker.pessimist.optimist.realist. creator.destructor.female.reader. writer.laugher.comedien.straight (wo)man.content.frazzled.absentminded. free.lovley.patient.daughter.friend.

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Poetry / Road Trip
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out here its so obvious that the road has just been laid upon the earth, in other places it seems as though it is a natural part of the landscape as though the tarmac has grown from the brush as if part of its evolution.
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Edie cries for everyone, thrown into bins Dylan cried the blues Joni parted yellow curtains At The Chelsea this afternoon overpaid prophets, socialites and sattelites collide. Take me away bring me back to that Chelsea. Broken free will combusts, change your frame, carry a shudder but hold on so tight, grasp irrelevant notions. Keep everything at bay, when the facade crumbles you'll fall apart. Nothing keeps you up. When you were living in The Chelsea I would walk by everyday. When the glamou...
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Your hedonistic desires replaced by a gonz0-journalism truth while you stand at the precipice, crying at the high-water mark. you're not alone, a whole generation of alma matter hopefuls gather here to stare at the place where kerouac could write ten novels leave me here to waste energy on hedonistic, wave-crest fantasy far rom the sting of a breaking point.
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Poetry / to stomach:
I'm not sure I completly understand this. What I'm getting from it is a beautiful, emotive piece about an eating disorder. The idea of using animals to describe the stomach is wonderful and unique. Your writing style is clear and fluid. This is a pleasure to read aloud, its as though the words propel themselve off the tongue.
Quotes / 6 Words
I don't know how quotable this is, but as a 6 word memoir its great. Very to the point, very clear, very relatable.
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Some beautiful imagery, "a single tear of sweat roll from the concave peak of her armpit and trace its way through the hidden canyons on her skin..." is just stunning. And I wanted to read "His fingers traced impermanent complex figures in the gently cooling water" over and over again. Not because of readibility, I just found it so visual, and nice to read aloud. Nice work.
Limericks / Scan Disk Function
a good start but...doesn't follow limerick form. Limerick form is AABBA, and I think there are too many syllables in the final line. Other than the form the concept is amusing and humorous.
Non-fiction / Six Word Memoire
Its hard to write a constructice review on a piece as concise as this. It makes me feel akin to you, and possibly every other writer. We are expressing who we are while still trying to figure it out for outselves.
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Poetry / Landscape & a girl
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