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I quite like it. Generally speaking, I am usually not that keen on rhyming poetry. However, I really like the imagery here. It creates this contrasting image in the head of noise versus silence...which is pretty hard to do. Nice job.

This was interesting, but I feel like it was lacking something. I felt like your word choices were fantastic, but your subject matter seems too preachy. Perhaps it is just me. I tend to not enjoy poems that preach to the reader. However, some do. I say play around with you imagery, as you have a knack for it, and see where it takes you.

I truly enjoyed this. The imagery was incredibly haunting...yet done in a way that made the grotesque seem beautiful. I intend to read more of your work. I absolutely loved this piece...great job.

This poem flows very beautifully, and I love the imagery. "Feminine wiles and papyrus dreams"...aghhh I love it. I think that certain parts of the poem are slightly awkward (the last few lines and "This lock in my mind/ Driving me to your kind/ Can be) but they can be cleared up easily. Altogether you definitely do have talent worth shaping. Nice work.