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AGE: 53
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 22

Been away for a while dealing with life’s occasional intensities.

I’ve always had a passion for writing and have had many non-fiction pieces published, as well as the odd poem. My short story, “The Bathtub Oracle,” appeared in Ellery Queen Mystery Magazine in December 2007. I am editing my first novel and seeking an agent and publisher for this venture.

I see myself as a fiction writer. I’d love to be a great poet and I envy all the great poets among you, though I hate pretentious crap. My poetry adheres to no rules, though I punctuate some of them. I’m British born and raised Canadian.

During the day, I work with a lot of visual artists, though I am not one. Also have a few musicians in the family. Art and music spill over b…

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Quotes / Six word memoir
Version 1
11 Reviews   11 Comments
I saw no future in hindsight.
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Poetry / Torch Run
Version 7
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She runs through San Francisco, past the drummers in the plaza, flanked by swat teams, and TV crews, and all this talk of snipers. She bears a torch that fuels contention, in the eyes of an unjust world. People look, but just see red, and she wants to join their fight. Passions boil, worlds collide; but there are handlers who divert her. Despite her best intentions, she can't bring herself to speak; because dreams can get derailed when you're veering left or right; and there's no future in hi...
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Poetry / Torch Run
Version 6
3 Reviews   3 Comments
She runs through San Francisco, past the drummers in the plaza, flanked by swat teams, and TV crews, and all this talk of snipers. She bears a torch that fuels contention, in the eyes of an unjust world. People look, but just see red, and she wants to join their fight. Passions boil, worlds collide; but there are handlers who divert her. Despite her best intentions, she can't bring herself to speak; because dreams can get derailed when you're veering left or right; and there's no future in hi...
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Poetry / A Word
Version 2
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A word escapes without warning, like a long chained lunatic on unmitigated impulse, hurtling through reputations. Radioactive. And after the initial blast passes from my lips, it slows like molasses, creeps disparagingly, like old bones in the rain, or a drunk at 3 am; wavering unsteady, lost and alone in the cold light of absurdity. A word now free floats across the clothesline, gets gnarled in the raspberry bush, is picked to ribbons by a crow until only a trace remains. But on my block is ...
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Poetry / Torch Run
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She runs through San Francisco, past the drummers in the plaza, flanked by swat teams, and TV crews, and all this talk of snipers. She bears a torch that fuels contention, in the eyes of an unjust world. People look, but just see red, and she want to join their fight. Passions boil, and worlds collide; but there are handlers who divert her. And despite her best intentions, she can't bring herself to speak; because dreams can get derailed when you're veering left or right; and there's no futur...
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Poetry / I Want It All
by Tawny
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Poetry / 8 a.m.
by jebozid
There's a lot about this I like but a few awkward spots. "Panthera" and "Pantera" : is this a deliberate similarity? "Her chestnut hair - now is..." You could eliminate "now is" and not lose the meaning but it would tighten it up. The mascara line is also clunky. Just shorten it and it will be better. "night" should be "night's." Not many doors lock on the inside with a key. "start to chase her" again, awkward. How about "the books attack..." "albino tortilla" while this is an interesting ima...
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Poetry / Dementia
by vickiebellew
Your message is very clear. Sounds like my first family without the dementia. You did a very good job of crafting this poem, but it could be great. The rhythm is off in many parts. Here are some examples: Lines 1-4: good rhythm Lines 5-8: not bad if you make it a separate stanza. It's a little clunky. Trim down line 5 a bit if you can. The "books and TV line" detracts from the flow. You lose the rhyme here also. You could delete this line and the one before and nothing would be lost. It would...
Poetry / 10 Sold Out Soldiers
by jebozid
Line 4, stanza 1: "orchids" would be better singular. Comma after "vase." Same line: how about "The yellow..." and take out "he." As is, it is awkward. Line 1, stanza 2: "Explosions swing..." vague. Lines 2, 3, 4 stanza 2: Good lines Stanza 3: 2 great metaphors: "lanterns meteor down," and "arctic smile." Overall sense of story: He plays like a madman but hates it, though it draws the crowd. He needs to play lullabies to soothe his passion? Excellent imagery. Great title.
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Poetry / Back To Basics
by AmyWalker
This is clearly a statement, a declaration. To hell with convention and all the rules. The narrator is just sick of being "nice" and "acceptable." I really like the first stanza. The third line in stanza two could be better. What it says is it's all about food and diet. "Outlets" is vague. The other thing about this stanza is you've got some rhyme in one and three ("clothes/loathe, and "no/goes"), which is not perfect but it works. For consistency I'd try to put some in stanza two. Otherwise,...
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