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AGE: 23
LOC: Wheat Ridge, CO
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 30

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Poetry / Untitled
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That crow was the first living animal I'd seen. That goddamn crow. Flying high above this scortched Earth. while I sit feeling like bacon. sizzling in gods forsaken skillet. The crow flew, high and by with a ka-kaw taunting me with obscene laughter. I knew what he was saying, "Hey, pitiful man, enjoy your breath cause when its gone and you're dead I will pick your bones clean and you will be forgotten a bleached skeleton resting in the sand and my belly will be full." I took a sip of warm wat...
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Poetry / Misery
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When you sweat in your sleep on the streets or in the park with your clothes on and don't know where you are. Stubbed toes and hang nails. Rotten eggs and spoiled milk. When you have a dry glass or an empty one, Too much drink and you're legless from whiskey or legless at all. A bug bite you can't scratch and a zit you cant pop. Gum on the soles of your shoes, or a rock stuck in the grooves. When the radio's on and you just missed your favorite song. The old haggard car with one head light no...
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Poetry / Euphoria
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13 Reviews   2 Comments
There’s a poison creeping And its killing me, A desperate man’s vivid dream. There’s a ghost singing And its calling me, Soothing into endless sleep. This body’s been bled And the human rind lies twisted Dried wrinkled leather Empty hollow, Time’s forgotten murder. There’s the opiate teasing And its tempting me, An anemic man’s iron cuff. There’s a mother superior And she spoils me, Rotting into wicked being. These hands are tired Clenched in fraught eternal prayer Filthy calloused flesh Ruin...
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Version 1
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Before you come over, Would you cake mud on your, Face Or maybe put a bag on your head. Cause when I see that you’re clean, I’m like melting ice cream. Dripping to the floor And half of me is wasting. Your skin commends A murderer for his sins. And no one has anything On your flesh nearly combusting. The devil couldn’t get any hotter, If he sweat boiling water. I’d like to thank your mother, And father For putting one inside the other, And nine months later, Birthing a girl that does cater To...
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Poetry / Untitled 1
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I want my tongue lashings to spill your blood, so it can flow through all these pages and stain them. And your tears to rain through, to wash away the words and leave me with a blank crimson surface, to write a happy ending. I want you to eat my pain, then vomit the emotions you never felt. And the acidic lies to burn away the lips That never spoke the words I wanted to hear. I want my anger to crush you, as it did me. Then break every imperfect bone in your body into perfection. And still ne...
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Poetry / Mbw Mbw Mbw Mbwe
I like the imagry a lot. But if there is an underlying message to be had, I must have missed that bus. Its about taking care of mother nature? With that being said, I guess from my point of view its a little unclear, I suppose it was the "slave names" thing. Generally though, its well put together and the word choice was great, there was some very good imagery in there.
Poetry / Mary Anne
this piece is somewhat abstract, and I have a feeling that if I knew the story behind it, like if you brifed the reader in a note, it would be much much more profound. I thought it was excellently written, very discriptive, and envoked great imagery. I loved the line " As of the people that we spit on. I wonder if you ever look above." That was great, however "And as if all we did was eating cherries " is grammitcally incorrect, and kinda made me fumble. Overall though, an excellent work.
Poetry / 4 A.M.
To me, the structure is symbolic and represents jazz, in a written form. If this was intended, excellent job! Your wording could be more, dramatic, or choosy I guess... like "i am me myself still awake at 4a.m." could be worded better, cause that makes the reader fumble when saying it, whereas, the rest of the piece has a nice jazzy flow to it. I can totally relate to this piece, seeing as its 3am here, no drugs, no sleep, no sex, thus lust, and maybe a bit of poetry. Great work.
Poetry / Courage Is
I think that both titles fit well, however, I do believe that "Her Race" would be slightly more fitting, due to the personal nature of the poem, and the title "Courage Is" simply doesn't do it justice. I like the emotion in this piece. As a parent, I can identify with you, and its great to read a poem that was written with such care. Great job.
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Poetry / I Live
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