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AGE: 24
LOC: Independence, OH
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 14
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / The Zeppelinite, Part I
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A feminine hand dipped a metal-nubbed ink pen into an ink well, and began writing in a medium-sized rose-covered book. A wolfhound sat with her head in her mistress’ lap as words covered the ivory pages. Hello my faithful diary. Today I finally go to meet the boy I knew as a youth as Benji, who is now Admiral Benjamin Laughton, head of his own airfleet of zeppelins. It’s rather strange to think of him as a pilot now, floating through the skies and away from everything. It seems so idealistic ...
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Though the building looks simple and the driveway is raked white gravel, the members of the Wind Beneath My Wings Christian Fellowship have a lot to be proud of and thankful for. One of those reasons is that they just finished building their church on Barber Road near 224 in Norton. The pride comes from the knowledge that they did it with their own hands. The white building looks sharp and clean, and flowers out front combined with fresh mulch makes it a pretty picture after three long years ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Oply
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In the usual way of things, we come back to one thing-war. In our history, our land of Oply has seen centuries of war over something or someone. Or, in some cases, over everything that is under the moon. Let me first explain about myself, the Chronicler. I am Louis de Monet, a half-French half-Oplian descendent from one of the first humans that came to Oply over 800 years ago. I live in the main capitol of the planet, Teth, and as the Chronicler I am traditionally one of the most influential ...
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Novel Treatments / Draconis, Chapter One
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Light filtered through the cool water, reflecting off of the silver scales that lined the bottom in the form of a sleeping dragon. Nostrils sticking out of the water, she slept peacefully until she heard the familiar footsteps of the dragoon who had been watching her for about two weeks now approaching the stream. She smiled, and lifting her head she shook the water off of her scales. Looking downwards, she noticed that the dragoon had stopped and was staring in awe of the stately form risin...
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Novel Treatments / Draconis: The Prologue
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Year One Clans are created by the Gods, chief of whom is called the Lantern-Bearer; the Heads of the Clans are immortal and demi-gods themselves. They are the ones who keep the first records. These records entail the creation of the world, its inhabitants, and the events that conspire around them. Year 30 The first humanoids appear. There are large human settlements in the form of tribes, and the few settlements of dwarves and elves lived in relative peace and seclusion. The Clans continued w...
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Poetry / The Dream
I think you did a good job. You made it flow, and had it rhyme. Not a lot of people can do that easily. Keep up the good work.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Duke's Abduction from Earth
I like the way that you created the feel of both the captor and the captive. Neither really understands the other, and even though the situation is bad, some good comes from it. I think you also have a possibility for a great novel here. Who is Duke? Why are we talking about him? It seems as though he is a very influential person in his own right when we start the story. Makes me very interested to hear more.
100.0% Review Quality (3 Votes)
This sounds good to me. The only thing that I found that needed fixing was this sentence: "No leader sprung forth to save them, no hero to bring the ,“Its” to happiness." Remove the comma after the. Otherwise, keep up the good work!
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Children's / Glory..Glory!
I like the way that you portrayed moving yet again from a 10 year old's perspective. It must be hard to move all the time, and I think that you captured it here. Keep up the good work!
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