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Non-fiction / Promises and Dark Skies
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I saw a rainbow today, for the first time in recent memory. Not just a fragment, or a disjointed piece, but the whole thing, the complete resplendent arc. Of course it was perfectly shy, moving imperceptively away, and as the car pushed onward, determined to catch up with the multi-hued celestial archway, the rainbow found a way to subtly stay just beyond our reach. It's a mystery I suppose, why rainbows are so timid. Maybe they just don't want people to find out what lies at the end of a rai...
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Non-fiction / Spring Showers
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The fragrance of honeysuckles impregnates the air, a delicate, savory messenger spreading the news of Spring's imminent arrival. Not even the damp breeze, a lingering testament of earlier showers, can drown out the faint permeating essence. Yet with that soothing aroma comes the realization that this scent will pass much too quickly and much too quietly, slipping away unbidden, as pleasurable experiences so often do. Temperamental clouds hang loosely overhead. They part just long enough to al...
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Non-fiction / A New Change
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Yesterday ended, merely another day, yet the morning found change. Chiseled brown eyes remained the same, though the view seemed more dynamic. The world peeled back, revealing a strange tint. Is this hue the color of truth, the final appearance of revelation signaling the end of a battle? Or has it always been this color, and eyes simply chose to be distorted by perceptions and personal lies? Or maybe there is no truth but perception. No, there exists concrete, firm statutes which govern the ...
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Non-fiction / Degredation
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I feel dirty, unclean, a shallow husk of degradated mortality. Part of me wants to peel away layers of flesh in the name of cleansing. However I cannot help but think this corruption goes beyond levels of epidermis. In fact I know it does, not in the type of knowledge which professes 2+2=4, but a deeper more portentous knowledge which exists beyond personal experience. A pertinent question might be: Why do I feel this way? For that I have no clear answer. To my knowledge I have performed no o...
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Non-fiction / A Night Like Tonight
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An unrolled tapestry descends, granting rest to those burdened by the rigors of Apollos celestial chariot. As dusk shakes the final effulgent rays from the westernmost refuge of a once cerulean sky, the wind holds its breath in reverence, of both the coming and the passing. The world itself pauses, ardently observing this cyclic changing of the guard. Moments eclipse unnoticed by Nature, who counts no time. For time is all she possesses, yet not in fabricated hours and seconds. Her time flows...
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Quotes / If you believe.
Such a small price for such a great promise.
Something about this reminds me of Harlan Ellison, which I mean as a compliment. At first I thought I was going to disagree with you. I like 'perhaps', 'maybe' and 'seems to be' because it encourages the reader to form their own opinions. But you won me over on the "architects of our novels" line. This was very insightful, and should prove quite beneficial for anyone seeking to exert his/her own voice.
Novel Treatments / The Light of Pensieri
Well I'm interested. I really like how the red stone keeps coming up, but its significance remains withheld. My only concern, and maybe you did this on purpose, is that Elie spends the whole piece wanting to stay, claiming they are safe at the woman's hut, then suddenly she says they need to leave before her father finds her.
Your grasp of the usage of comedy is great, it works well in this piece. Although I have never been a big fan of using parenthetical statements as much as you did, you made it work. My only suggestion involves sentence # 4, replace some of the 'they's' and 'their's' with more direct nouns. English professors consider a pronoun without a noun nearby a 'Type-3 Error', and it can get confusing for the reader. Overall, this was enjoyable to read.
Overall very solidly written, good usage of both personal experience and research. My only suggestions: 1) when you first mentioned ADHD you should have written out the proper name, other wise not everone will know what it stands for, 2) although difficult, write around linking verbs (is, are, was, etc). Writing with an active voice makes for a better read.
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