I liked it. How to get creative when dry? I heard writers then take t drink.

I like it, the humour. We are all dummies.

Congrats on your novel. But lots of works needed on QLto correct structure and layout as they are wrong.Message me if you need more infor.(Save credits).

I like the essential idea but dislike the query letter because all is not clear. I suggest unfolding the core elements of the plot in the correct sequence.Message me if you need to. Good luck with the novel

You have the words for your 'hook' to an agent but in the wrong order. When a deadly microbe buried deep in the frozen Tundra is discovered and exploited by a ruthless arms dealer determined to hold America to ransom,then death follows, as it did, when ancient civilisations were wiped out. See message.

The 3 pages reaf fie but the synopsis is too detailed.Aim to reduce it to 2 pages. Good work otherwise.

I've read your query and suggest the genre is mentioned in the greeting to the agent. Then the number of words should be mentioned at the bottom of the letter after your signature. What is missing is a suitable hook. I mean a line that will catch the eye of the agent and make that person keep right on reading. Maybe something like: When CIA agent Ridley Fox learns about a deadly microbe he knows he will die, like the rest of the world, in his desperate attempt to defeat those responsible unle...

Interesting story. Though use of Mikell ; Marcus; Martika and Master can confuse the reader. Consider changing their names so they don't all start with the same letter. In your opening to chapter 14 there is too much telling. Suggest using the recipe : Action.Dialogue.Action. Maybe: As Lauriana headed her horse at speed into the dense forest she ducked her head to avoid the low branch of a tree. "Damn this forest!" she shouted aloud, reining in before she was struck by another branch. Then ke...

Very briefly your query letter ,though it has an attraction, lacks the three essential key elements that make up a query letter. Specifically : your QL opens with a question. It needs to be replaced with a 'hook.' What part of the plot or the whole book can be summed up into a sentence that will grab the eyes of the agent? You need to find that 'hook' to keep the agent reading. Next the synopsis of the plot without too specific details. Include the aims of the hero, what disasters he faces an...