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If we ever have a Category 5 hurricane, this flashlight will be useful. If we ever craft something steampunk, this lawn mower will be useful. If we ever own an elephant, this thick chain will be useful. If we ever build a playground, this monster truck tire will be useful. If we ever cook a turducken, this roasting pan will be useful. If we ever make our own strawberry wine, these molding corks will be useful. If we ever shrink, this stepstool will be useful. If we ever move to Rome, this pas...
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Start your new life now, She will want to spend a night with you, buddy. Shaman like skills, why do you fall so weak and slow? Big news is expected, Open yourself to the world around. Only prestige.
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My eyes burn as she selects shirts from a rack awash in purples and pinks. “How about this one? Or this one?” I want to vomit upon the sickly rainbow of pastels and appliquéd witticisms. I shall wear black until they make a darker color. I find solace in a dressing room, the floor covered in consumer shrapnel. Alone. Always alone. Better that than the inundation of their energy, their willing conformity, their stares. I walk as an alien among them, longing to return to my mother ship. She sig...
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She said: Nothing is real and never was. The sun greets the stars and says hello while the moon gets mad for being alone as the music plays it's low, sad tune, we listen to the sound of church bells far away which might not be there anyway . . . And I said: What?
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Gonna shoot myself a turkey. Won’t settle for store-bought bird jerky. Rifle, muzzleloader, or bow, Gonna git that fat tom Up on Cumberland Plateau.
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This is a decent poem. Not sure why you put it in the humor/satire category - unless there is something amusing that I am completely missing. You use a lot of metaphors, some of which are interesting and original. I think you overused them, though. I wish you had created more of a story or explained more - something to make me feel for the narrator or have a connection with them. Why use italics? It makes your poem harder to read.
This is a decent attempt to personify nighttime. While I like the idea behind this poem, there are some major flaws. It suddenly develops a rhyming scheme. It would be more consistent if the entire poem conformed to the same pattern. Some of the lines are too long. You mention Night's "vessel" twice, but don't elaborate on this idea so it seems like a throw away metaphor. With a little more work, you could fix these flaws and have a solid poem.
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