The first line grabbed my attention. The idea of a former commando working at a night club is interesting. I like that you kept the letter short, which I think will increase the likelihood that someone will actually read it. I don't like some of the overused phrases you use: collision path, battle for his life, breathing down the protagonist’s back, ect. I think that it detracts from the originality of your story. The sentence, "The owner of the club is a major player in the drug dealing worl...

I like that you kept the letter short and offered a brief summary of the story at the beginning. The tone you use is appropriate and respectful. I think you mean a wrath of vengeance rather than a wreath of vengeance. I questioned the line "This is TITAN RACE the story of the fight for the lost civilization of Atlantis." It suggests that the civilization is already lost - so why fight for it? Maybe drop "lost" if, in the story, the civilization still exists. Good start.

I like this quote quite a bit. It rings very true for me. I like the string adjectives that you string together and the fact that you kept it as one sentence rather than breaking it up. I don't think you need the comma after "zone" - it seems to break up the flow of at the very end of the quote. Good job.

This haiku follows the traditional syllable count and is grammatically correct. However, it lacks the imagery necessary to draw me in. The exclamation point at the end makes it sound like an order. I am also put off by the begging in the title (do you mean favourites?) and the Notes for Reviewer.

I think that this will definitely appeal to people who play frisbee golf, or even just frisbee. The quotation marks aren't needed. You should put this on a tee shirt.

I like how you staggered the lines of this poem, and how you didn't capitalize any words or use punctuation. I don't think the last line quite fits with the other two - I was thrown off by the use of "wanders." This is the only line I would change. Good job.

I like the idea behind this quote, and I think that it will be appealing to many people. I don't like the punctuation in the latter part of the quote. It breaks up the flow of the piece. Try removing the second comma and reword it a bit. Good job.

You were right when you said that you waxed a little windy. But I like the tone you use in the piece, and some of the descriptions were very interesting. There were too many run of sentences - by the end of some of them I had forgotten what the beginning was about. There were also a lot of extraneous facts that weren't that important to the story. I liked that you mention the historical setting, but you went a little overboard. I didn't like how you referenced the future, but then dismissed i...

This piece was very interesting. I wasn't sure at first where you were going, with all of the poop, but I liked what it became -- a snapshot into a strange relationship between lovers. I found it a little difficult to keep track of who was speaking, since you didn't use quotation marks. This was especially true when the main character is singing in the bedroom and then Terry starts talking. Good job.

I liked the first four lines of this limerick. I thought that they flowed well, and I liked the choice of words. The last line just didn't seem to fit. The flow was different and the last word didn't rhyme. If you edited this line, it would greatly improve the entire poem. I also didn't understand how the title of the poem related to this piece.