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AGE: 38
LOC: West Bend, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 09

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Dear Mr.Laghi: I previously sent you the first chapter of a dark comedy called Dizzlemuck.  I am also seeking representation for a literary novel entitled After the Death of the Ice Cream Man. This work concerns a young man named Jonah Swain who is haunted by disturbing memories when his troubled mother is killed in a car accident. I used this framework to meditate on the various apparitions of Death that have appeared to Jonah over the course of his life: the mysterious but distant...
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Dear Mr. Laghi: I have attached the first chapter of a novel that I think you might find of interest. Dizzlemuck: a Wee Folk Plague Survival Guide is a satirical tale that wonders what would happen if a band of naughty Scottish wee folk invaded modern small town America. Imagine Our Town if rewritten by Tom Robbins after watching an all-night marathon of Gremlins, and that is the feel I was going for with this sometimes dark comedy. Dizzlemuck follows several citizens of the town of...
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Short Story / Midway
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Once a year, like a recurring dream, the circus came to town. The carny folk set it up in the field where the old elementary school used to be. Young and old came carrying smiles and change, and jangled down the midway at night. I remember when the Ferris wheel stopped us at the top and you swore you could touch the moon. Your long slender arms stretched towards the stars, and when they fell they landed around me. I should have stolen a kiss from you then, there was no one around to see. But...
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Short Story / Take Back the Night
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He crouched in rare darkness, listening. Not much to listen to out here, really, just the rush of late-night traffic on the highway seventy-yards away. But still he listened. You never know. When the cars and trucks became few and far between and the night was quiet it was tempting to continue on hastily, figuring no one was around. But that quiet hides things, just as this darkness did. Darkness. He sighed. If only that were true. What he wouldn't give for darkness. If there were true darkn...
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Short Story / Take Back the Night
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He crouched in rare darkness, listening. Not much to listen to out here, really, just the rush of late-night traffic on the highway seventy-yards away. But still he listened. You never know. When the cars and trucks became few and far between and the night was quiet it was tempting to continue on hastily, figuring no one was around. But that quiet hides things, just as this darkness did. Darkness. He sighed. If only that were true. What he wouldn't give for darkness. If there were true darkn...
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Novel Treatments / *Shadows of War*
Some of this is in past tense, but you slip into present here and there ("I shrug," "when I turn around," and so forth). Just read it over closer, or out loud, which always helps me catch my tendency to slip into rhyme (a strange quirk in a novel). As far as punctuation with dialogue, it should go inside the quotation marks, like this: "Try to be helpful in these reviews," she said. Or: "I will." At one point you write: "I shrug and say 'Sure'I would have..." etc, without any punctuation afte...
Novel Treatments / Fruit
Actally, the fact that you wrote it quickly helps... some stuff on Urbis is way over-written. I feel I've been given enough to be intrigued but not enough to feel spoon-fed anything, which I appreciate. I'm unsure of the setting, but you don't specify whether this is the beginning of something or just somewhere in the middle, so that doesn't bother me much. I am intrigued to wonder about these "camps" and this apparent sabotage of the blue pipes. One suggestion: nix the word "whilst," which s...
Short Story / Chapter 1: Early to Bed
Whoever suggested making this the lead to a novel is dead on. The tone suggests much more than a short piece... in fact, the tone reminds me of Hunter Thompson writing in the style of Spillane. There is certainly a hard-boiled, noir-esque feel here. There are some technical issues here and there, words you could cut (like "Familiar to ears," rather than "to the ears"), but those are things you worry about only after you get through the violent rush of a first draft. In other words, start writ...
Novel Treatments / and then...night changed
For some reason this reminds me of Italo Calvino... the start to a Calvino novel. Get this character to do something and you've got a good tone. Follow this tone and style the way a musician follows an improvisational line and it will lead you somewhere. Just remember: real people do things, not just feel things. Good luck.
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