This is not my style, but I suppose there is definitely a place for it out there in the world. Several things to be avoided: unless the word is vital to the poem (and even then, it's still not recommended) or the word follows a sentence-ending punctuation, do not capitalize it - in this poem, the beginning of every line is capped, which draws importance away from the phrases, images, and points you're trying to make; write in complete sentences - it's the easiest to understand and strengthens...

As I was just writing to someone else, use capitalization sparingly, and only where it is necessary - to emphasize a specific word, at the front of a proper noun, or after any sentence-ending punctuation. Too many capital letters confuse the reader and detract from the important words and images in the poem. Avoid using lofty abstractions, like "love." I want to know what love is specific to this poem, not some vague concept. You can show what it is by using images, descriptions, and symbols....

I love this. Just capitalize the "these" at the beginning. It is short, poignant, and makes a powerful claim on the reader. Brilliant.

It's all right, but it reads like a list rather than a poem or story. It doesn't really tell me much about you or your creative process, just a list of very broad characteristics that can be applied to anyone. I think you've got to be more creative with this, and don't be afraid to open your wings a little. :)

It's definitely evocative, and I love the spin on the over-used little saying - that's terribly clever. It also says a lot about the character and the culture/setting she's in, which is impressive considering there are such few words. I love it.

Great. Nice use of the six-word limit. You managed to be evocative and political, fantastic! I would say, then, just capitalize "corruption" and slip in a period after "birth." This is a short story, after all. It really should have proper punctuation and capitalization. That is my only qualm; fantastic little piece, and best of luck in the contest. :)

This is a lovely line. However, it is not a story. It is a poetic description of something. Beautiful, yes, but I don't think it succeeds at your goal. Sorry to say, especially because it is so beautifully and skillfully written. It's also not really a memoir, because it's not about you or your thoughts - though this one isn't as problemsome because you can easily argue that the fact that you notice such things says a lot about you as a person and writer.

Cool. Definitely intriguing. Still, my complaint is that it doesn't really read as a story, it doesn't really tell me much about you. That's understandable, considering the six-word limit, but still. It reads more like a declaration or exclamation.

Nicely done; I love the use of the word "fragile." It's such a powerful imaged. This is a very strong six-word story. Good luck in the contest! :)

Very nice. I like that you turned it around like that; it's definitely a quoteable little piece. Very simple, and every word counts---an essential part of the six-word story style. Very nice work.