Curtastrophe's profile

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AGE: 28
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 03

Born in North Dakota, live in FL, and traveled allover. I drink beer and like to cook good food. I also like jalapeños.

        As for my writing influences: Kurt Vonnegut, Stephen King, and Tom Robbins are all authors that have entertained me completely and influenced my writing over the years. I have a love/hate relationship with the writing of Dean Koontz as I find his plots to be either engaging or extremely campy. Heart of Darkness
is one of my favorite books of all time; the movie it inspired was pretty good too.
        As for authors I have met personally: David Sedaris was probably the coolest. He took the time to make eye contact with everyone and signe…

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Version 2
8 Reviews   15 Comments
*Swallowed madness*. *Puked*. *Painted with it*.
Opportunities
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / The Retailer's Prayer
Version 1
23 Reviews   30 Comments
Our Retailer, Who art in heaven Hallowed be Thy Sales; Thy kingdom come, Thy will be done, at the mall as it is in heaven. Give us this day our daily coupons, and forgive us our frugality, as we forgive those hardcore shoppers who get there before us; and lead us not into debt on Black Friday, but deliver us our online purchases before the 15th of December. Amen.
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Haiku/Senryu / The Writer's Cycle
Version 2
19 Reviews   19 Comments
Stare at a blank page. At the break of bright morning, an ashtray is full. You go out to work. Drooping eyelids tell a tale as the boss lectures. Night brings a new thought and your brain switches back on. Do it all again.
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Legends of Old Karel Chapter 10
Locked
“…were a small price to pay.” I would hope so! ;) patted the horse on the neck. / patted the horse’s neck. A suggestion, “The moment she’d first noticed fire in his eyes, she knew what to name him.” This I think could come earlier when the horse is first introduced. up a head made her jump / up ahead From the third paragraph to the beginning of the fourth, the verb “took” is used three times. Most of the time when I see this word, an alarm goes off in my head. It’s like the sentence is asking...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Windows to the Soul (part 1)
“The man jerked awake suddenly.” Call it ironic, or counterintuitive, or whatever, but words like “suddenly”, “immediately”, “instantaneously” and their kin actually _slow_ the action in the sentence. “The man jerked awake.” Bam. Having said that, I think this opening scene would be more effective if he slowly came to his senses and the narrative took the reader on his journey of this. Perhaps he’s thinking that he’s in bed and with his eyes still closed wondering why it (actually the floor) ...
Purely a preference, but I don’t think words like “began” or in this case, “started” are necessary. To me, they’re _incomplete actions_. I always think of it as “Mikell started to turn on the light.” Does he or does he not? In this case, “…as tears started to flow.” I would suggest either “as tears flowed down her cheek.” or “as tears welled up in her eyes.” was gone and I left to find her. / gone, so I I like Mikell’s description of his dream. It’s pretty horrifying, but not graphic. He asks...
Wow, I must say . . . The story blew my socks off this time around. Not that it was bad to begin with, no no. But this time I _really_ got a feel for the characters and the relationships between them. The story started off with believable premise, built up as personalities clashed, and reached a satisfying conclusion--sublimely sorrowful as well as positive. It's looking pretty polished, but I'll give it another read through to see what pops out. A suggestion, " “Why not? It's my day off from...