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AGE: 33
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 01

I am a mother of a 12 year old boy, who is a great kid. I am engaged to a wonderful man. Our dog and four cats are kind enough to share a nice home with us ;) I am most at home outdoors, though. I love camping and canoeing and hiking and caving (not officially spelunking, I don’t think, lol) and climbing-another non-regulated reckless adventure I risk at almost any opportunity.

I have been dabbling with writing for many years, and also in different spurts throughout my life.

I have a ton of ideas and am trying to get as many of my plots written as possible, so I have something to come back to when the well runs dry, so to speak ;)

I give thorough, well thought out and honest constructive criticism in my reviews. I always welcom…

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Haiku/Senryu / A little Pink Trajedy...
Version 12
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Knew a %{color:pink}pink Bunny% He challenged me 'til I %{color:red}snapped% his neck like a %{color:brown}twig%. Must have been %{color:red}rabid% A most %{color:purple}psychotic% %{color:pink}rabbit% A %{color:red}biting% %{color:pink}Bunny% With %{color:red}glowing red eyes% And *protruding* buck %{color:yellow}teeth% _Tried_ to take my %{color:brown}eye%. I'll %{color:red}find% you %{color:pink}rabbit%! You wil not %{color:green}hide% _forever_! I will be %{color:brown}crouching% I'll see...
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Short Story / Shades of Night
Version 4
2 Reviews   7 Comments
Florence rocked in the chair in her backyard and watched them flutter through the tree branches. She could hear the leaves rustling as they moved through the high branches. Most would have dismissed both, the movement and the sound, for the whisper of the wind. And most would have ignored the fact that the air that night was as still as any she had ever encountered. Florence had seen many, many nights. She was 106 years old, with an upcoming birthday. Maybe she couldn’t get around as easily a...
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Non-fiction / Flower
Version 3
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Seed planted; blooming; waiting to blossom.
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Non-fiction / Created World
Version 2
1 Review   0 Comments
Imagination and pen created a world.
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Flash Fiction / Paul the Internet Guy
Version 1
2 Reviews   10 Comments
Paul was a lonely guy. He suffered from a social anxiety disorder and rarely left his home. Only necessities could force him from his safe haven: the internet. He could be anyone he wanted to be by simply creating attractive avatars that looked the way he wanted to look. In this world, he could talk to anyone. Even girls; and they were very interested in him, too. Why wouldn’t they be? He was damn good-looking in this graphically created world, and it became increasingly more real to him. He ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Pooh in Meatspace (part 2)
by Marvin
Darko had left me...' Had can be left out in most of the instances it is used, here for example. 'Darko left me..' keeps us from being slowed down, and loses no effect whilst quickeneing the pace of reading. The same for any 'had been(s)'; they can genereally be replaced with 'was' or 'were' to keep things moving in the readers mind. I won't point out every instance, nor have I noticed many, just thought it was a worthy thing to point out :) '...naked and inadequate in the absence of ...' aga...
Short Story / Cut
by malapropist
By your calculations, Fiona should already be 1 inch taller than the world's tallest woman. (Sorry, no more nitpicks!) The visit to the dr seems a bit abrupt. I'm not sure if it is in the correct place, IMO. I like that you begin at the end and aren't using the rigid linear format, but am not solid on the positioning. Perhaps it could begin with the visit to the dr, allude to Fiona's finishing touches in italics (? just a thought) and then go through the ad and the meeting. Again, the second ...
Novel Treatments / I hate those things!
by inamourata
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Short Story / I'm Not Crazy
by IndyWalsh
Being sedated wouldn't really make her forget anything that happened before she was sedated (i.e. reached the hospital). But Schizophrenia would. Maybe say it is not uncommon to forget 'an episode'. I will be more accurate and will not lose any of the suspense. I like the way Macy's character begins o blossom nearly half-wa through. I feel like you could do more with her thoughts earlier on. In the beginning she seems a bit one dimensional and the story feels a bit bogged down with so much di...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Be a slave to be Great !
by DresdenCarter
'you have to slave away at it' may I suggest 'become a slave to it'...the other _almost_ borders on offensive, but great opening thought and great title! 'Work until you feel you can go no more.' maybe add (and change up a bit) 'and then you go more anyway; you go until your body breaks.' I am familiar with the athlete's mind, and think this would express more potently what you are trying to portray here. 'I don't want people...' _other_ people? I think you could lose the 'me' in the followin...
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