Good piece it has strong emotions .“I was good woman and you were a scared boyfriend” ^ an a goes there. thanks for letting me read this it was really good.

Using When I write for every other line threw me off at first but for the way the poem is written it may work. Loved lines 1 and 2 When I write I release all stress or frustration, Through my lyrical creation… Thats how I feel when I write and most times why I write. I also like the form it makes the body look beautiful. Overall solid piece.

I want more give me more! I would definitly keep reading I want to right now! Kate is a wonderful character as is Ash. I love the images of her going through the bag looking for her stuff and finding the hidden money while the people behind her are waiting. I would buy this book if it started like this. I hope to read the next chapter. Thank you for giving me the chance to read this great piece I don't see a thing I would change at all. :)

I love the fast pace and chaoticness of it (if thats a word).Great imagery. I especially like this line, Screaming lips blow candle tips,.It is really relatable and very well written general.Get this onr published for sure.

Overall good poem very relatable and emotional topic. The first stanza was my favorite Don’t bury me in the cold hard ground, With a hundred mourners all around. Tell them all to go on home, And take with them their tears and moans. In this line is be supposed to be me? Please take be back to yesterday For some reason when I read this line I feel like it could say more or something differently My soul has more to give you, so, Thanks for letting me read you are a great writer I hope that this...

I like the piece it has great imagary and I can see myself there. There is only thing that I would say was had to read and that was the the second line. "The best, most incredible feeling; the vast, sudden relief; the most carefree moments; the coolest thing ever." But over all its a great piece that makes me want to read on!

I love the topic the piece flows well. This is my favorite imagary of the piece. Take up your swords Slay this danger Facing a new horde He uses the darkness to quell the threat about to take your life The overall piece was great and well written.

It is funny and follows the limerick rules I love this part here....Thailand has a town called Phuket. All broadcasters were trying to duck it. Over all good piece.

The thought behind the poem was good and overall its good.But it reads choppy in parts like this one...Now you are driven out of spite. Self. One. Over all you are a talented writer keep writing and making a statemeny and getting better.