Very. . .strange. May I ask what exactly is is about?

Whoah. That first sentence there, as a simile, is rather confusing. . so is the rest of the first paragraph. Not everything has to be stated with complexity, though that's your style. I tend to mix in even the simplest sentences and the mose complex for effect. "Her team of archaeologists had finished uncovering the Casket and the latest pictures emailed to her PC that morning gave her very little doubt." This whol sentence doesn't seem to stay on topic when reading it. Put a comma after cask...

I definitely just read another piece of yours, which was GREAT, thank you. It failed to save, sadly. I'll repeat for this one as well. You are possibly now on of my favorite poets, and it seems I have a new goal set. I turn sixteen in two weeks, which means I have fifty-four to become as good as you are, and at least break even of my need to be a prodigy.

First off, let me say, the idea of entire continents being completely submerged is, as I shall put it, far-fetched. As it is, if the polar ice caps melted, for the most part, only low-lying regions very close to coastlines would be affected. Sure, most of India would go, Florida, too, but the water level would simply never rise above the continents' height. It's not as if Hurricanes deposit more water on the Earth than there was before. Second off, you change tenses throughout. Meteorologists...

The piece is moving, but grudgingly so. It doesn't reach out and snare you, but instead you must keep yourself well-attuned in order to find a deeper interest. That said, you also have a few spelling and grammar issues that are easily fixed. "delegate": delicate "Onto my minds": Onto my mind's I'm sure you don't need me to show them all. some of your analogies are also a bit questionable, long-worded, almost silly. Cut down the wording, and you'll give more power. after all poetry is about pu...

I liked it. Quite a bit. Your words hold meaning, and you haven't dragged it out too long. I may have to call you out on "wheeled," as it should be "wield," though. Scatter a few commas through there in the right places, and the meaning will come forward even more. I can't tell you how much improper grammar can negatively affect a piece. for people like me, it screams out at every little mistake. That said, I love the meaning behind it, and the less-than-constant stanza structure.

It's hard to say how much I enjoyed that. It's a piece of writing that, like so few ever do, opens your mind and plays with a truth behind it that's so difficult to find. Your wording is absolutely wonderful, and the power you inject into each and every line never falters, and continually led me forward as I read. It pushed the envelope of space that my mind was currently occupying, and it challenged my mind to see what there is to be seen. Excellent. It bothers me only slightly that the line...

This made me smile, as it bespeaks of a current friendship I'm in. Great job, there's a lot of truth in it. You know what you're talking about, and I love the last two lines.

Lots of goals. I'll start by responding. After all, it's a question, and I skipped the poem in your notes fortunately so I do not know the answer. . . You do what is good, and you do what is right, it doesn't matter if it hurts. You've got yourself to answer to, and only yourself to blame if it doesn't work out. As a single entity, I myself, believe that the right road is almost always the painful one, but that makes it worth it in the end, even if you don't realize just how right you are. An...

Ah, 'Riss. I didn't even realize this was yours until I started reading it. Your structure could use a bit of work, in truth. It's too broken for my tastes. I like poetry that flows very well. This one's a bit hard to focus in on, and I had to pace a bit at your house while reading in order to get the tunnel vision sometimes required for absorption. Nevertheless, your message behind it is a good one, and you do well. But yes, grammar, punctuation, so forth. Definitely.