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And then reality did something very strange.It started with what sounded like a gunshot. And there was a very good reason for that: It was a gunshot. It was followed rapidly by another gunshot. And that was followed by Nick Dunne-Davis charging through the fields, screaming like a butchers boniff and headed straight towards Barry. That would probably have been enough to shock Barrys brain into disbelief; the fact that Dunne-Davis was wearing a red and white floral-patterned summer dress with ...
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THE SLEEPER Eamon’s knuckles tightened over the steering wheel as he pointed the rented car onto the mainstreet. The Atlantic air blowing through the heater filled his head with a scent that was familiar yet strangely unwelcome, like the metallic sensation of blood in his mouth after a fight. He wiped the windscreen clear, then wiped the beads of perspiration forming on his forehead. Eight long years had passed, but somehow it didn’t seem long enough as the car chugged past the old pub and sh...
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This was obviously a painful piece to write, as it seems to stem from personal experience. It starts with a fairly harrowing opening and finishes leaving you wanting to know more, which is a good start. I feel you could really push the mental agony of Dinah's experience even more - highlighting as you have, the almost insignificant physical pain when compared to the mental anguish she experiences.
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It sounds like there is an idea for a good short story in here but I'm not sure if you've nailed it yet. Maybe the ending needs a little work (unless I'm missing something) to give it more of a punch. Still, the imagery and use of language are good. Hope this helps.
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