Deacon_Eddie's profile

Can you spell narcissistic? Self important much? Look, you may have a little insight about what makes writing more interesting but you could be much less heavy handed. The fact that not every writer is created equal is not to discourage the less experienced or more insecure from applying to these pages. If you want polished writing go to the library or bookstore. I think the idea of Urbis is to establish an on-line colony of writers who help each other. God blessed you if you're published. Mo...

Funny! because it's meaningful. Good one.

As an introduction it hangs together well. I have to agree that it's a cliche subject but, we have all been writing about the same things since pen was first pressed to papyrus or pigment daubed on the cave wall. You are right; it's a matter of perception or approach. Coming up with something fresh is very difficult which is why we prize it so highly. Try to think of a way to present this subject in a new way. The potential for a good story is there. Graphiclly speaking, from Superman and Cap...

I like it. It has an immediate feeling. The scenario hangs together well. The characters need to be developed. The relationships between the characters needs to be developed. Do the others not talk to the protagonist exclusively or do they not speak to each other as she suggests? Do they have relationships outside of the circle of the "5 musketeers"? Why does Jessica go to lengths in explaining her role in James' death as if she feels guilty for it but then says "..no one was to blame"? Why i...