DemonGoddess's profile

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AGE: 18
LOC: NY, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 28

My name is Davida. I love writing and reading. I want to become a fully published author, but I know I still need a lot of work, and a hell of a lot of editing.
I love intelligent critiques. If something can really be fixed and improved, do tell me. If you’re going to write an overly long review that doesn’t help me, expect an equally long, overly boerd answer right back.

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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / 6 Word Memoir
Version 1
7 Reviews   1 Comment
Student Body President... Unlikely Drug Dealer
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Humor/Satire / My Writing is Bold Like
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Killing yourself in your wedding dress.
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Short Story / Last Living Souls
Version 2
3 Reviews   0 Comments
Last Living Souls By: Davida Clark Of course, the situations surrounding his impregnation were a mystery, but Kaolin’s approaching delivery was very apparent. With all of the death and turmoil around him, he could have just ended his life like all the others, becoming a suicide statistic. But the kicking being inside his body kept him going. Ever since the water born mutations began, and the people changed, becoming… different, the life that we knew as normal had ended. There was no medical n...
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Young Adult / Bacchanilian
Version 1
16 Reviews   10 Comments
“Bacchanalian” By: Davida Clark If it was a movie, the scene would have gone something like this: The rain falls down heavily on a sea of people. The camera focuses on a Greenwich Village street corner, on a teenager, me. My T shirt sticks to my skin, and my black hair falls stringy around my face, completely soaked with from shower-like downpour. Brown eyes, once closed, are open and fogged over with pure ecstasy. A parade of rainbows passes in front of me as I raise my arms, screaming, flai...
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Short Story / Last Living Souls
Version 1
7 Reviews   0 Comments
Last Living Souls Of course, the situations surrounding his impregnation were a mystery; but Caolia’s approaching delivery was very apparent. With all the death, and turmoil around him, he could have just ended his life like all the others, their bodies now strewn in the city streets, but the kicking being inside kept him going. Ever since the water-born mutations began, and the people changed, became… cannibalistic. And then the virus gained the capability to go through bodily fluids. It wen...
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Okay... this is a very nice poem. It's well written, you keep the rhyme scheme. The only thing that really wasn't clear to me was your idea. Was it to be taken literally, or should I see it as a symbol for earth and sex in nature? You create a defined emotion that is purely sexual. You use really good images, and you're definately perfect as far as creativity.
Humor/Satire / Diseases
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Even though I'm not a professional, I must say that you have a way with words. With a piece of writing like that, I don't see why you wouldn't be able to find one. The story is well put together, and you explain each one of your thoughts well, if not sometimes in a plain way. I think you deserve all high marks, except in the genre of horror. To me, the story isn't traditional horror. Dramatic: yes, mysterious: yes, horror: not so much. I'd really like to read more of it though.
Poetry / discard discord
The descriptive language you use is lovely, and the images of the cross wires soldered to the flesh and the eyes straining and snow blindness are particularly intense. It's also lovely how you hold on to the rhyme without having it bind your style.
Oh my goodness. After reading a completly sterile story, this is a refreshing blast of randomness. I thought it was going to be kids stuff, so it was so fucking hilarious! It's really good for flash fiction, like the kind you find that are only a certain length. Kudos
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Bragga

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