I like it even though it seems sad. Never gave this much thought to a tear. Very sensitive and sweet.

I like this. Very nice, and I like the static lines to create the flow of the poem.

Kind of witty

It was good

Really interesting chapter. Romantic, mysterious, promising, definitely kindles the imagination and desire for more story. I like it. Keep the chapters coming.

Hopefully there will be a upside to this poor victum, Walter. "Gay bashing" is horrible in reality, or stories. This character definitely needs building up and up and up on the positive side. Good Luck with the finish.

I think there is definitely a imaginative story here. However I could not connect the "Peoples Front Party" and "Promethean Trust ' and the role that both Mark and Walter had in the scheme of things. I get it that they are both gay and work in the same place (hince the small references to the kisses and holding hands going into work) etc. But is this a political or personal revolution that is being put together here ? Looking forward to more chapters to answer questions and delve more into ch...