That's a wonderful piece. I believe i understand your intent. It is the discovery of finding out that you have died emotionally/ Very well done!

i enjoyed, but also didn't understand the flow, but i guess there shouldn't have been any.

This is the first part of this story that i have read and i enjoyed it greatly. I desire to read all of it's parts. I'm so curious about so many things that were mentioned.

I liked this a lot. Very creative and the way you used everyday examples...lets just say i like it.

very eroctic and detailed. I enjoyed every sentence. You have a very seductive way of getting your work across in this piece. I'm going to take a cold shower now.

As beautiful as you. I feel your fustration and anger. I desire to hold you and scream at the injustice. I'm glad I have been able to share a piece of you. Thanks

I like this piece. It is well written. Good job!

I'm pretty indefferent. I see great promise, but it just carries the feel like you shorten it or just didn't complete it.

I like it, i like it a lot! This is a very sexy, intelligent poem. I thought you were heading one way, but you proved me wrong. I like this a lot. Keep doing what you're doing!

Very very creative. It pulls and releases you several times throughout. I enjoyed. I did seem jumbled at times. I found myself rereading once or twice to try to gather your direction or feelings. Over all, it is nice and very visual. Please keep doing what you're doing.