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AGE: 19
LOC: Colorado Springs, CO
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 01

I have been writing stories for as long as I can remember. My newest story, Antonia is my first real novel. It is the first in two series that I have planned for her. when Reviewing please give any advice, I want to know what you think.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter One: incomplete
Version 15
3 Reviews   3 Comments
Antonia’s blonde hair, glistening like the morning sun, circled in the air, mimicking her body’s movement as it twisted her staff sweeping through the air toward her opponent Joneen Farshal. Joneen arched her back, knees bending, so Antonia’s staff swept over her red shirt, barely avoiding a finishing blow. In response, Antonia swung her staff once again at Joneen who instantly brought up her staff to block it. Antonia, her exquisite blue eyes full of concentration rapidly s...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Prologue: The Beginning
Version 4
2 Reviews   3 Comments
“In times of darkness, the world’s eyes are blinded. All they see is the darkness, wishing it to disappear and never return. What they don’t realize is that you can only see true beauty and light through darkness. If you don’t know darkness, how can you know light? How can you see with blind eyes?” Antonia Van’Dragon Evil, an unbearable force, consumes those who seek its power, takes the hope from those who let it rule them. There are few however, who live ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter Four: A Wish to Die
Version 6
5 Reviews   9 Comments
     During everyone’s lifetime there is always that one face you will never forget; that one face that haunts you day and night. I have many but one of those faces is Saran Van’Bratta, the first person to betray my people. She was the one who convinced the others to do nothing as the Athean race was becoming extinct. She was one that I never wanted to see again but… destiny wasn’t kind.      It turns out that my beloved Anton,...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Chapter Three: Solitude
Version 3
6 Reviews   8 Comments
??**Four Years Later...**?? In the Fields of Blood, two statue memorials standing tall, glistened in the mid-day sun as a young woman stood, blue-purple eyes gazing up at their stone faces. The first was a woman rider, sword held high in triumph, hair sculpted as if blowing in the wind. Behind her stood a dragon, wings spread wide. On the two layer round pedestal, words were carved on a sheet of gold saying ‘To the selfless Riders and Dragons who bravely gave their lives for Athea; You will b...
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Version 1
3 Reviews   0 Comments
If I was an Irsih potato person, I'd try to find a potato to see what I tastes like, When I was done, If I liked it, I would eat myslef, Then I'd be extinct.
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Flash Fiction / The Picnic
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Short Story / The Broken Swan
The story was good and all that just one ishu with me... It didn't grab my attention. Through out the entire story, nothing grabed out at me... my suggestion.... grab your reader in the beginning, other then that its really good.
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Souls Dawn Chapter Eighteen
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Same thing as the first part. It is well written. Your word choice is fenominal. You chose well to put this in First person. Sorry can't be real helpful. All I can think of to say for the moment is that it is amazing. Write me if I need to be more specific in this or the other review