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AGE: 23
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 18

Many of my short stories are developed and inspired from dreams and although, when reading most, you will think they’re somewhat weird I think it’s interesting to develop and share some. I am not looking to publish but I would like to grow and be able to develop an intreguing piece.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Haunted Beauty - Revision 2
Version 2
12 Reviews   5 Comments
A tall white building was nothing out of the ordinary for Chambers Street. A series of buildings united together to create an immaculate procession of high class businesses. Spirits Health Spa stood tall in the centre of the series next to Axes Hair Salon. Opposite the procession of tall white buildings was an old disused church. It was never revealed as to why it had been neglected and to look at it was in pristine condition. The stone was painted white and detail that covered the exterior w...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Haunted Beauty
Version 1
4 Reviews   4 Comments
Some pampering at a health spa was not supposed to be anything out of the ordinary. It never was so I didn’t expect anything out of the ordinary…not until I walked on the grounds and night fell as if a light switch on the wall had been turned off. Several ground lights flickered on producing a dim orange glow across a small grassed bank and part of the court yard which was supposed to be the path leading to the health spa’s entrance…but this was no health spa. I had come to the right place as...
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Novel Treatments / TEN DAYS
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Poetry / Ugly Side
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Poetry / Wishing
The first four lines are pefect - nice and simple; easy to understand The rhyming in the next four lines as well as the rhythm really break away. Then the last four lines, although the rhythm is slightly out it is much easier to read and it reads relitively flowing. The overall subject matter is perfect and is so easy to relate to...I just think a little tweeking it would be even beter
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / The Torment of an Infertile Woman
That was a lovely story - I totally relate as I also have PCOS but have sadly not been able yet to conceive and have had a miscarriage last year. Going back to the story, I would have liked to have had a name for the characters even if they were changed just so I could connect that little more. There are a couple of sentences that need a little work because there are a few words that skip ....eg. "The young mother was single and struggled quite a bit to care for herself and new baby." it woul...
Short Story / Mr. Delmar pays a visit
I like how this has been written. This kind of style I haven't read in some time. However, I did find "My family that consisted of my mom and dad along with one older sister Mary who was ten and younger sister Barbara who was 4, not to mention Sugar our dog and Tinkerbell the cat would all squeeze into my dads gold Dodge and make the long trip from our home in Melrose Park Ill. to Union City ,Tenn.," a long and hardgoing sentence and feel it could do with being broken down a bit for easier co...
66.6667% Review Quality (3 Votes)
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