The road is forked and I am feeling blind. - How can one 'feel' blind? - Try 'The road is forked an I am blind' Where is the promised land I’ll find. - Surely a question mark is needed here - And also this would sync better with the first line if 'feeling' was missed out. I trust in you,your guiding me, - A space between comma and 'your' - And 'your' really should be 'you're' as you're trying to shorten 'you are' yet my fate rests in men who cannot see. - Capitalise - Also, this is out of rhy...

I will openly admit before submitting this review that I'm at a bit of a loss in regards the quotes, but I'm not really a Biblical kind of guy. That doesn't interest me, but it can still be of some relevance... However, what I do know is poetry, and I like the sounds and the appearance of the words on the page. The stepping of lines draws attention to the withholding and releasing of information.

Indeed.

I'm not exactly an expert on flash fiction, but this strikes me as a decent attempt, and I could see it being published somewhere. I like the last paragraph best, but am also impressed by the fact you can put together believable and well presented dialogue.

I like and respect your use of that strange form: ie. posing a poem as a serious of musing statements and facts. But the rhyming didn't work for me, I'm afraid. I thought it was too forced and did not flow freely. Try and not structure your work so hard, because you've had a good idea and a decent effort here.

I don't particularly like the sound or implications of the poem, though I respect the idea of berevity. I like the idea of 'massaging' a paperback, but paperback implie reading, whereas the pen writes. Perhaps your hands or eyes might massage a paperback.

I hope this is correct. That's a fantastic accomplishment for a life. The beat, too, is effective for such a short piece.

I think you need to review the structure of this poem. There doesn't really seem to be much holding it together. The rhyme seems unrelated the the lines and rhythm. Also, 'farthur' isn't a word. It's 'further'.