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I like the way you contrast the two people, even if I don't know the artists listed. The bride stating that the friendship started in high school seems to imply that high school is when we sometimes experiment and take up with people who are different. This as compared to 7th or 8th grade when we develope friendships just because we like another person. I think you used that very effectively. You mention her blue eyes and your brown eyes leading this reader to wonder if the two of you are of ...

"I fear love a narcotic without injection" Are you saying that you fear falling in love because it could be just getting hooked on a drug? You might want to do a spell check on some of this. You should also watch the spelling (convoluted) and I would stay away from slang terms and expressions such as "chillen". I think this is a good start.

I like this, but I'm not sure that it fits the requirements for a haiku. The word syllable count is correct. The definition I have for a haiku is it should" involve nature, use simple words and expressions (hypochondriac) Includes a strong clue about a particular season involve the senses.